Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some university candidates want to pursue other subjects in addition to their majors. While, others prefer complete devotion to main subjects. This essay will discuss both views and will argue that a balance learning approach should be maintained between majors and other subjects.

On the one hand, many fields require more time and efforts like engineering and medical. Engineering and medical fields are backbone of the economy. Infrascture and health are the main pillars of any country. Both fields demand theoretical knowledge and technical skills. The roads, buildings, bridges, and dams are built by engineers and the trust we have on these marvels of engineering is because of quality of engineers. Similarly, we put our lives in the hands doctors because we believe in their capabilities. Hence, many individuals want to give their complete time and focus to their major subjects because they want to be best in their respective fields and to build a safe environment for the people who have trust on these individuals.

On the other hand, other subjects are also important for the future of students. Globalization has changed the landscape of employment. Many corporations and fields now require knowlege of other subjects and skills to adapt their working environment. Fields like business management, sales, accounting, finance, and consulantancy demand other skills in addition to their majors.

The competition, unemployment and better incentives have also put pressure on students to learn about other subjects along with their majors to be able to fit every requirement of the organizations. Many students also want to learn about other subjects due to their personall hobbies and interests. Many individuals choose majors because of money, family and future demand of the field but they have other personal interests as well, due to such reasons they want to divide time between majors and other subjects they like.

The students should be able to manage time properly if they want to learn other subjects along with their main subjects, because if you are unable to handle your main subjects and still considering other subjects will affect your studies and you will not properly gain knowledge and skills of any of them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both perspectives and state a clear view: “a balance learning approach should be maintained.” The discussion of focused study is relevant, using engineering and medicine to explain why demanding qualifications need sustained attention. You also give several reasons for studying beyond a major, including workplace expectations and personal interests. However, the first view receives more concrete explanation, while the benefits of broader study are mostly asserted; for example, you list business-related fields but do not show how learning another subject helps a student in a specific situation. Your conclusion is also brief and mainly warns about time management rather than fully reaffirming the balance you support. Develop both sides more evenly with a clear example and a fuller final judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a final paragraph expressing a qualification. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” make the main contrast easy to follow, and the ideas within the first body paragraph generally progress from demanding professions to the need for expertise. Some cohesion is less controlled, however. The final paragraph begins “The students should be able to manage time properly” without a clear link back to the stated preference for balance, so it reads more like a caution than a conclusion. Several ideas in the second body paragraph are crowded together, and repeated references to “other subjects” and “majors” make the progression somewhat mechanical. Use clearer links between claims and examples, and end with a concise synthesis.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including terms such as “theoretical knowledge,” “technical skills,” “globalization,” and “unemployment.” These choices help explain both professional demands and students’ motivations. You also attempt more specific vocabulary, but some word choices, collocations, and spelling errors reduce precision: “complete devotion” is less natural than “full commitment,” “better incentives” is unclear in context, and “consulantancy,” “knowlege,” and “personall” are misspelled. “Backbone of the economy” is understandable, though the claim is broad and would be stronger if made more precise. Aim for accurate collocations and proofread spelling, especially when using less familiar terms; this will make your ideas sound more natural without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including a contrast clause in the opening and longer sentences explaining professional demands. Most meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors appear across the response. For example, “While, others prefer complete devotion” is an incomplete contrast construction, and “the trust we have on these marvels” has an unclear grammatical relationship. In “we put our lives in the hands doctors,” an article or possessive is missing, while “if you are unable to handle your main subjects and still considering other subjects” shifts structure and does not form a parallel conditional. There are also issues with articles and agreement in phrases such as “Engineering and medical fields are backbone.” Review sentence boundaries, articles, and parallel structures, then check that each long sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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