Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in my opinion i beleive that we don't have to stay just in our system or our daily studies or daily school rotinf because doing just one think or studying on the same subject all the time make the student boring we have to search about new thinks new objectives maybe we have to follow the uni clubs or somthing else for exmple me i was studying in the same era the same subject the same things for 6 month but sudnly i feeled soo boring so bad i hated my studies but i follow one of my uni clubs i searchs about anothr oportonities another ideas another objects made mee feel soo good thats helped me to reorganise my informations and my mind

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You express a relevant personal view: studying only one subject can become boring, and joining a university club helped you feel better and reorganise your thinking. However, the prompt asks you to discuss both the value of learning other subjects and the case for concentrating on a qualification. Your response develops only the first view; it does not explain the opposing argument or clearly weigh the two positions. The personal example is relevant but brief and does not fully support a developed argument. The response is also 126 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to address the task fully. To improve, explain both views, state your position clearly, and support each point with a specific reason or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic line of thought: you introduce your opinion, describe becoming bored with repeated study, and then explain how joining a club helped. This gives the response some overall direction. However, nearly all the ideas are placed in one long, unpunctuated paragraph, so the reader has difficulty seeing where one point ends and the next begins. Connections such as “because” and “so” are attempted, but the sequence becomes unclear in the personal example, particularly around “but I follow one of my uni clubs.” Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and connect each reason and example with clear, accurate transitions. This would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “subject,” “studies,” “uni clubs,” and “opportunities,” and you try to express personal reactions such as feeling bored and reorganising your mind. However, the range is narrow and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “same” and “another.” Frequent spelling errors, including “beleive,” “rotinf,” “sudnly,” and “oportonities,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some expressions are also imprecise for an academic essay, such as “new objectives” and “another objects.” Build a wider set of topic-specific terms and check spelling; for example, use “broaden their knowledge” or “focus on their degree requirements” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example, “because doing just one think or studying on the same subject all the time make the student boring,” and you use a reason-and-result structure in the personal example. However, sentence structures are mostly simple or joined together without clear boundaries, and errors often make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “make the student” instead of “makes students,” “I feeled” instead of “I felt,” and “I searchs” instead of “I searched.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with the response beginning “in my opinion” and containing no full stops. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past-tense forms, and divide longer ideas into complete sentences with clear punctuation.

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