Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many high level students want to gain knowldge many subjects in extre of their major subjects.But some student think that it is important to full attention and you full time given the main subjects. I will discuss the both views and i will given the my personal opinion.

To commence,some university students thought that student want to learn more subjects rather than to attention only main subjects. Student want to learn more knowledge from other subjects because if the students read more subjects so they improve their skills. For example, one student involve in arts subjects and they do not full attention on these subject and they learn science subjects so though this they improve science skills.

On the other hand, some studends believe that students want the full focus on main subjects If they not give full time own subjects so they are not acheive the goals. Morever, if students learn other subjects os it effects students main subjects and at tha laste main subjects and other subjects are mixed so finally students are fail in own subjects. Students learn only main subjects and given your full time in main subjects and improve the knowledge in main subjects

In conclusion, both are important because some sthudent learn main and additional subjects but some want to focus only one subjects and learn knowldge

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both views and state that you will give your opinion, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is minimal: the first view is supported only by the general claim that studying other subjects improves skills, while the example about an arts student learning science is unclear and not explained. The opposing view is also asserted rather than developed, and the conclusion says both approaches are important without clearly stating which you personally support. The response is 27 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to explain your reasons and provide a relevant example. Develop each view with a specific, explained example and make your own position clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and several ideas are repeated rather than connected or extended. For example, the second body paragraph repeats that students should give full time and focus to their main subjects, without adding a distinct supporting point. Some references are difficult to follow, as in “they improve science skills” after the example about an arts student. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each reason to its explanation, and ensure pronouns refer unambiguously to the people or subjects discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “main subjects,” “full focus,” “qualification,” and “improve their skills,” so the reader can identify the general subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “subjects,” “students,” and “full time.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “knowldge,” “studends,” and “acheive,” as well as unnatural phrases like “in extre of their major subjects” and “learn more knowledge.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling; for instance, use “broaden their knowledge” and “alongside their major” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, including “because if the students read more subjects so they improve their skills.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range of sentence structures remains limited, and many attempts at complex sentences are not controlled. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur throughout: “some university students thought that student want” shifts tense and number, while “if they not give full time” lacks an auxiliary verb. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, especially around sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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