Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, Many students in universities have desire to learn more about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. On the other side some people argues that we should have to give all of the time and attention to studying for a qualification. In my prespective we should have to learn different subjects.There are several reasons of doing that.

At the first, The major reason of that is some students have more ability of understanding than other and when they complete their own study they try to focus on other subjects. It help students to pass their time in study and get more knowledge about other subjects as results come students choose their own subject in english but they also like to read history books which keep them fresh and gives more knowledge about history.Besides, Its also some students hobby to read different articels on different books.However some students feel bored by reading their subjects over and again.

Furthermore, Many students belives that they have to focus on their own studies. There are many advantages of this such as, Students can do better in their own studies by reading the same subjects and learning new things in their own studies it helps them to do better in their future and get more opportunities according to their subject. In addition they also argue that by learning our own subject we can do better in our exam.

In conclusion, We have to focus on our subjects first after that we can lear

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear preference for learning additional subjects, and you also mention why some students concentrate on their qualification, so both views are present. However, the discussion is only partial: the first view receives more attention, while the second is supported mainly by general claims about exam performance and future opportunities. The example about students reading history is relevant, but it needs fuller explanation to show how broader study benefits them. Your conclusion is cut off after “we can lear,” so it does not complete your opinion. The response is 233 words, 17 words below the 250-word minimum; this limits the space available to develop the ideas. Add a complete conclusion and specific supporting examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and an attempted conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “In addition,” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from students’ ability to understand, to passing time, to reading history and hobbies without clearly connecting these points. Some transitions are mechanical or awkward, such as “At the first” and “Besides, Its also.” The final sentence is incomplete, which leaves the essay without a clear ending. Organise each body paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general discussion, including “qualification,” “opportunities,” “subjects,” and “knowledge.” There are also attempts to express ideas in different ways, such as “focus on other subjects” and “focus on their own studies.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, including “have desire,” “pass their time in study,” and “as results come students choose.” Spelling errors such as “prespective,” “articels,” and “belives” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim for more precise academic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, describe students as “broadening their knowledge” rather than simply “get more knowledge.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a reason clause in “by learning our own subject we can do better in our exam.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “some people argues,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “It help students,” which also needs agreement. Articles and sentence boundaries are often problematic, as in “Nowadays, Many students” and the run-on passage ending “history books which keep them fresh and gives more knowledge about history.” The final sentence is incomplete. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation, and build longer sentences with clear clause boundaries.

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