Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Man is a social animal. Some students in the university want to learn some extra subjects in addition to their main subjects. However, others think that it is compulsory to invest their all time and attention to studying for a qualification.

As far as myself is concerned, I think it is exquisite to give your all focus and efforts to one thing rather than giving partial time to many things at a time. We should have a firm mindset to perform the task outstanding which we have continued. Do not quit it in a midway. Here, I will support and defend my point of view with few reasons which are as follows;

To begin with, one should stick to that task which he is doing irrespective of other things. If a student wants to learn other subjets with his main subjects then he would automatically get distract no matter how much struggle he is putting to keep both

the things balanced or together. Matter other than centre of focus is all distraction whether it is productive or useless.

Furthermore, it is evident that a man is succeeded when his aim is to acheive a particular goal. For instance, a man who is already running a well-known and stabilized business when opens a new business with the previous one, he itself loses it's interest and control from the first business. And this behaviour will harm him because he has eradicated some brilliant points from his buisness unintentionally.

To sum up, it is objective to assert by considering the illustrated facts that doing one particular thing at a time proves much beneficial than picking many objects at the same time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear preference for concentrating on a qualification, and the discussion includes reasons and an example about a business owner dividing attention. However, the task asks you to discuss both students’ views and give your opinion; the opposing view is only mentioned in the introduction and is not explained or supported. Your main argument is also asserted rather than fully developed: for example, the claim that studying other subjects will “automatically” distract students needs qualification and a relevant university-based example. The business example is not closely connected to students’ choices. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits of studying additional subjects, then compare these with the advantages of specialisation and support your position with specific evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “To sum up” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression is limited because both body paragraphs support the same position, while the other view is not developed. Some linking is mechanical, particularly “Here, I will support and defend my point of view with few reasons,” and the conclusion largely repeats the opening claim rather than drawing together the discussion. References such as “that task” and “this behaviour” are not always precise. Organise the body around the two views, use links that show contrast and cause clearly, and ensure each paragraph advances a distinct part of the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “firm mindset,” “particular goal,” “productive,” and “eradicated,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this topic, such as “exquisite” for a position, “invest their all time,” and “a man is succeeded.” Spelling errors including “subjets,” “acheive,” and “buisness” also reduce accuracy. Some expressions are repetitive or vague, including “one particular thing” and “many things,” which limits precision. Aim for natural academic collocations and topic-specific wording, such as describing students as “dividing their attention” or “developing a broader skill set.” Check spelling and word forms carefully, and choose vocabulary that expresses the intended meaning rather than simply sounding formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple sentences and attempts at longer structures, including conditional forms such as “If a student wants to learn other subjects…” and a relative clause in “the task which he is doing.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Examples include “I think it is exquisite to give your all focus,” “a man is succeeded,” and “he itself loses it's interest and control.” There are also problems with articles, pronouns, agreement and sentence construction, as well as punctuation in the semicolon before “To begin with.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses and check that subjects, verbs and pronouns agree. More reliable control of these patterns would make your argument clearer.

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