Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Few students of an university believe that they have to learn other subjects as well, apart from core academic subjects, while some students belive that they must focus only on major subjects and qualification. Though students want to focus on their grades for getting higher salary role, I belive that learning other subjects with core subjects will give them extra edge over other to tackle presure situation.

On the one hand, number of students want to give their complete attention on their grades and core subjects because they believe higher achivements of academic qualification lead to provide them a higher salary role. Therefore, such people are not interested in extra-curricular and co-curricular activities because they think this will become a reason for the reduction in their grades, and it eventually leads to the lower salary. For example, in the US mostly students are focus only on grades. They believe, a student who 90% in their academic will sucess more compare to a student who got 50%.

On the other hand, many students willing to learn extra subjects, which are not associated with their field. I also agree with this opinion because such students belive that this can develop skills that will help them in the future at their work-place, which cannot learn only from subjects that are taught at the classroom . For example, for a investment learner, playing football can help him/her to built a skill like, co-opration, co-ordination, and handling the presure in the intense situation. These all skills will be very useful for a student in the future.

In conclusion, quite people believe that gaining knowledge of core subjects is enough for getting sucess. However,I strongly believe that development of extra skills with the core subjects will help to learn more practicle knowledge compare to study only academic subjects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state your position clearly: the introduction acknowledges students who prioritise their qualification, while the conclusion and second body paragraph support learning beyond a major. The examples about grades in the US and football developing cooperation and pressure-management are relevant. However, the first view is explained mainly through the assumption that higher grades lead to higher salaries, and the example comparing students with 90% and 50% is asserted rather than explained. The benefits of studying other subjects are also somewhat general; the football example illustrates extracurricular skill-building more than learning another academic subject. Develop these points with clearer links to the question and more specific reasoning to make the response more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow, and your opinion is consistent. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, connections within paragraphs can be mechanical, with repeated reliance on “because,” “therefore,” and “for example.” Some references are also unclear, such as “These all skills,” which makes the link to the preceding example less smooth. Use a wider range of linking methods and make each example’s relationship to the main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “core academic subjects,” “qualification,” “co-curricular activities,” and “develop skills.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions such as “extra edge” and “intense situation.” However, the range is limited by repeated words such as “students,” “subjects,” and “skills,” while several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable: “achivements,” “sucess,” “presure,” and “practicle.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “higher salary role” and “give their complete attention on their grades.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations, and choose more precise terms when describing the benefits of broader study.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “Though” and a relative clause in “skills that will help them in the future.” The main message is generally understandable, and paragraph-level sentence patterns show some variety. However, errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction recur. For example, “Few students of an university” has an incorrect article and awkward structure; “many students willing to learn” is missing a finite verb; and “a student who 90%” lacks the verb needed to complete the clause. There are also problems such as “a investment learner” and “these all skills.” Review basic sentence completeness and subject–verb patterns, then proofread articles and punctuation.

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