Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays some students want to lean other subjects with their main course and other said that it is more benefical to focus and time to studing for a qualifictaion. i agree with thi statement becuase if the student concerate on one thing they can not face any hurddle in the lives i will discuss both view in this essay.

Firstly, I discuss the first statement Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. i disgree with this statement because if the student studing the other subject also they can not focus on main subject. the main reason that they can not manage the both for for example if the student do the part time job how to manage the main qualification, other subject study as well they have more responsiblity of their family and they want some personal time for performing the other activites like going to germ, spend the time with friend ect. i belive that they can not manage the times and feel tried and exhausted .

Secondly, i strongly agree with statement . Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. becuase if students focus on the the main goal and makes the direction simple they can achieve the success in less time . because they pay more attenation more constrated on the study as well work and they can mange the booth study or work . may be somtime it can be difficult but i think they can face difficult without pressure and stressed.

In Conclusion My perspective is that student should be focus on main gaol or qualification rather then involvment in ither subject. which can affect the peronal as well work life becuase they can not mange both at one time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a clear overall preference for concentrating on a qualification, and you attempt to discuss both views. However, the first view is mostly rejected rather than explained: the essay gives reasons students may struggle to balance extra study with work and personal commitments, but does not explain why some students value learning beyond their main subject. Your support for the preferred view is also limited, relying mainly on the general claim that focus leads to success in less time. The example about part-time work is relevant, but it does not fully illustrate the benefits of either position. Develop each side with a specific explanation or example, and make your opinion more precise and consistently supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its basic organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from extra study to part-time work, family responsibilities, and leisure without showing how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “because” are repeated, and some sentences run together, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow. The conclusion repeats the main opinion rather than drawing the discussion together. Use one main point per paragraph, explain it in a logical sequence, and use clear sentence boundaries and more varied, accurate links.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “qualification,” “responsibility,” “personal time,” and “pressure,” and the reader can generally understand your intended position. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, such as “concerate” for “concentrate,” “benefical,” and “hurddle.” Some combinations are unnatural, including “focus and time to studying” and “makes the direction simple.” Repetition of “main subject,” “manage,” and “focus” also limits precision. Build a bank of accurate academic collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, express the idea as “devote time to studying for a qualification” and “balance academic commitments with work.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional reasoning with “if” and a contrast between study and other responsibilities. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty or difficult to follow. Examples include “if the student studing the other subject also they can not focus” and “if students focus on the the main goal and makes the direction simple,” where clause structure and subject–verb agreement are not controlled. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “student should be focus” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation during revision.

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