Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays, student have different opinion about study some students prefer to lean other subject to their main course and other people think that studetnts should focus on the qualification . I strongly agree this statement but learning other sunject can improve knowledge and skill. i will discuss bothe views in this eassay so stay with me .

On the on hand , studying different subjects with their main programme . they can increase their ability ans strength. Univeristies progames take more time for studing . students makes assignment and work on thesis as well. so they can not manage both two programm for example business students can learn comunication and computer silk for better job other than they develope the new skill and ability but there are also disadvantages. students canot manage the both at the same time for example medical students can not manage to their study with other subject becuase medical study take much time for practice or study .

On the other hand people people believe that students should focus on main qualification or subject rather then involve other subjects. they can achieve the goal in less time and if students have free time they can learn new skill. which can be use for find the job. for example if the student chose the one programm and just concetrated on their qualifiation . they achieve high grades and receive the better opporunity in future. these student types of student bright future .in addition when they search job in market i am sure they are not receivethe refusal.

In my opinine both views have advantages and disadvantage but i agree that student should focus on the main goal and they do not make the part of other subject. becuase if they can they can manage the both at the same time

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a clear preference in the conclusion: you support focusing on the main qualification, while acknowledging that additional subjects can build skills. The examples about business students learning communication or computer skills and medical students having limited time are relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The benefits of studying a single qualification are mainly asserted through claims about grades and future opportunities, without explaining why these outcomes follow or giving a specific example. Your position is also less consistent in the introduction, where “I strongly agree this statement” does not clearly identify which view you support. State your position precisely at the outset and explain each main reason with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding opinion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Phrases such as “On the other hand” help signal a change in viewpoint. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from benefits to workload and then to a medical-student example without clearly connecting these points. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or repetitive, and the conclusion repeats the idea of managing both subjects rather than neatly summarising the argument. Use one clear controlling idea in each paragraph, order supporting explanations and examples logically, and make references such as “these student types” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “qualification,” “thesis,” “assignment,” “ability,” and “grades.” This gives you enough language to communicate the general topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning less clear, such as “computer silk,” “make the part of other subject,” and “receive the refusal.” Spelling errors, including “qualification,” “communication,” and “opportunity” when misspelled in the response, also distract the reader. Build a bank of accurate academic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “develop communication and computer skills,” “take on additional subjects,” and “face rejection” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas with clauses and examples, including “because medical study take much time” and “if students have free time they can learn new skill.” However, sentence structures are limited, and attempts at longer sentences often contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. There are frequent problems with subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries: “student have,” “students makes assignment,” and the fragment “On the on hand, studying different subjects with their main programme.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and articles; for example, “Medical students may struggle to study another subject because their programme requires extensive practice.”

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