Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the quantity of individuals in America with respect to their yearly earning in different years like 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Overall, high amounts are earned by large group of people in 2015, the lowest amount earned by many individuals in 2011, while intermediate earner presents fluctuating trends.

In 2007, the persons who earn less than 25000 USD are almost 25 millions, which increased to round about 28 millions by the year 2011 and again fall 26 millions mark after four years later in 2015. This shows ups and down trend. The inhibitants whose income range from 25000 to 49999 USD accounts for 26 millions, 30 millions and 28 millions in the year 2007, 2011 and 2015 respectively.

Those who earn 50000 to 74000 USD annualy are 22 million in 2007, 2011 and 2015. This group displays a constant trend throught the years. The number of residents who are able to get an amount of 75000 to 99999 US dollars are 14 million in 2007, 13 million in 2011 and 15 million in 2015. This show a little bit fluctuating but moslty steady trend. Lastly, those Americans who are able to manoeuvre the amount of [redacted phone] or more, are 30 millions in 2007 and declines to 28 millions in 2011 and huge increment occured in 2015 to almost 34 millions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a discussion on university students learning additional subjects versus focusing on a single qualification, but the student has written a report describing a bar chart about income levels in America. Because the response does not address the task prompt at all, it fails to meet the requirements for Task Achievement. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which further impacts the score. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your essay directly answers the specific question asked.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2007', and 'Lastly'. However, because the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt, the logical progression is disconnected from the task requirements. The paragraphing is functional, but the lack of relevance to the topic makes the overall coherence ineffective in the context of an IELTS essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for describing data, with terms like 'fluctuating trends', 'constant trend', and 'huge increment'. However, there are some awkward collocations, such as 'manoeuvre the amount', which is not appropriate in this context. While the range is sufficient to describe a chart, the lack of relevance to the actual essay prompt limits the ability to demonstrate a wide range of vocabulary appropriate for an argumentative essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the lowest amount earned by many individuals in 2011' (missing verb) and 'inhibitants' (spelling error for inhabitants). Additionally, there are issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.

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