Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some university student want to learn other subject in addition to their main subject. Other believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. In this essay ,I will discuss both the views and provide my opinion.
On the one hand , few students of university want to learn about other subject in addition to their main subject because they want to encourage their knowledge by additional subject and also think it is good for our study and future. Moreover ,student use additional subject for increase their grace marks and its as good skill which student learn with their study like learning music and art . Furthermore , its help in children for sharp mind and also increase the catching power and chance of their future jobs .
On the other hand ,other student think that its more important to give all their time and attention to study for their qualification because its necessary for student if they gain more knowledge from extra subject than they can handle easily future problems of their study ,like learn music and art .In addition ,its help the student fast remembering power or things easily capture and can help to know about other type of art or music and cultural activity in my world .
In conclusion , although people have their own opinion about the distinct arguments . I however ,think that their should be a balanced opinion for both of these.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development is limited. The arguments are repetitive and lack depth, particularly regarding the benefits of extra subjects versus focused study. The essay is also slightly under the 250-word minimum, which negatively impacts the task completion. The ideas are presented in a general way without sufficient supporting examples or logical expansion. To improve, you should aim to fully explore the implications of each perspective with specific, well-reasoned arguments rather than repeating similar points about 'music and art' in both paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', the internal logic within paragraphs is weak. For example, the transition between the benefits of additional subjects and the mention of 'grace marks' is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the use of 'its' and 'their' without precise antecedents. Improving the flow between sentences would significantly enhance the readability and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'good', 'study', and 'subject'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'encourage their knowledge' (instead of 'broaden' or 'expand') and 'catching power' (which is not standard English). The phrasing 'increase their grace marks' is also imprecise in this context. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and use words more accurately to convey your meaning, moving away from simplistic or non-standard expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Some university student want', 'Other believe') and incorrect use of articles ('in my world'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'its help in children for sharp mind'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before commas. These errors are frequent and occasionally make it difficult for the reader to follow your intended meaning. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement is essential.
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