Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Few university students are eager to learn other electives in addition to their core subjects. On the other hand, some believe it is necessary to give their time & focus on studying for a qualification. In my view both have their advantages as it opens and broadens the horizon for future avenues and also a better prospect in the main stream of profession.

A few university graduates prefer to concentrate on their area of interest specifically the core subject and master their trade in the same field of interest. This helps them focus, gather detailed information with regards to the subject matter, carry appropriate research and finally get good grade. Forr example, a hospitality graduate who has already decided to become a chef will concentrate on core subject of cooking and baking rather than studying economics.

On the other hand, some university professional prefer to focus and spend time to study for a particular qualification. for eg. A hotelier would learn all the aspect of hotel management by studying both management and core subjects with practicals. This boost them to learn the entire hospitality industry by getting a better exposure of the hospitality sector. This also opens doors to better job prospects like restaurants, cafeteria, hospital catering, airlines and much more rather that having limited avenues.

In my opinion having a balance of both will

not only limit ones learning but also broaden the horizon for future prospects. Learning a new subject adds to ones knowledge and when study for a qualification you add it your profession. A qualification

helps you to grow overall even sharpening ones leadership and managerial skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the second paragraph attempts to explain the benefits of focusing on core subjects but relies on a narrow example. The third paragraph is slightly confusing, as it seems to argue for a 'particular qualification' while simultaneously describing a broad approach, which weakens the logical progression of the argument. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that each point is fully extended with more nuanced reasoning and clearer examples that directly support the specific view being discussed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical flow between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand' and 'For example'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. Additionally, there are instances where the connection between sentences is slightly disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the transition between the topic sentence and the supporting details is not entirely smooth. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds clearly upon the previous one would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'hospitality industry', 'core subjects', and 'professional'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'main stream of profession' and 'get good grade'. Furthermore, the vocabulary is somewhat basic and lacks the precision or sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to education and career development, while paying closer attention to word forms and pluralization.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'Few university students are eager to learn other electives' (which contradicts the intended meaning), 'Forr example' (spelling), 'some university professional prefer' (subject-verb agreement), and 'This boost them' (subject-verb agreement). Additionally, there are issues with punctuation and article usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for minor slips would significantly improve your score.

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