Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
While some students insist to learn about other subjects in addition to their major subjects, others argue that it is more essential to spend all their time and attention to studying for a selection. I believe that in most cases learning about other subjects as well as their major studies.
On the one hand, student gaining knowledge about alternative subjects support them in many aspects. For instance, if a learner is provided by outer studies rather than their own subjects, they get a priority towards skill development and creativity learning. Such aspects can support them during their profession. Hence, the job qualification and skilled based students could get attention due to this trend.
On the other hand, paying attention towards their study plays a vital role in their selection and profession. A learner's job is to learn according to their subject studies, due to such reasons paying time and attention towards their own subjects is essential for their profession in their related field. For example, if students spend their time in their studies, they can succeed in their relevant field by grabbing their dream job.
In my opinion, despite having some negative aspects of learning other subjects, I believe learner should pursue other subjects in addition to their major subject. Such trend provide learner with better skill opportunities and professions.
In addition, learning other subjects with the major subject can sharpen their skills which may support them during professional jobs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the essay is under the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which negatively impacts the development of ideas. While the main points are relevant, they are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. For example, the argument regarding 'skill development' is mentioned in the second paragraph and then repeated in the conclusion without significant elaboration. To improve, you should expand on your examples and provide more detailed explanations for your claims to ensure the response is fully developed and meets the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a basic logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In addition'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. For instance, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. To improve, work on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects smoothly to the next point.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'subjects' and 'attention', throughout the text. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'provided by outer studies' and 'selection' (when you likely meant 'qualification'). To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to use more sophisticated vocabulary and idiomatic expressions related to the topic of education and professional development. Focus on using synonyms to avoid repetition and ensure your word choices are contextually accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'insist to learn' (should be 'insist on learning'), 'skilled based students' (should be 'skill-based'), and 'Such trend provide' (should be 'Such a trend provides'). These errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are noticeable. To improve, focus on proofreading your work for basic grammatical accuracy and practice using more complex sentence structures, such as conditional clauses or relative clauses, while ensuring they are grammatically correct.
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