Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is often argued that some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. other believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Majority of the commentators claim that unviersity students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects.
This essay will analyse the important to give their time and attention to studying for qualification.
First and foremost , studying other subjects in addition to their main subject is not pivotal in university. For instance studying other subject doesnot have any value they should learn their main subject to have a good score. evidence of this is provided by attention to studying for a good qualification. To be more precise they need to have a time and attention in studies to socre a good amrks without any stress. In other words students should rely on only topic given by sir or teacher in a university rather going on their own topic.
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more impottant to give all their time and attention to study for a qualification. On the contrasy it is noted that students should study main subjects. A good illustration of this is students should not be burden while studying of their own. they should study what the main subject is to score high marks. Similarly others believe that students should give time and attention. In fact time and attention both are important to have a qualified reults.
To recapitulate, university student should focus on main subjects and give time and full attention to have a quallified results.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the two views, but the development is weak and repetitive. The position is somewhat clear, but the arguments are not well-supported with relevant examples or logical reasoning. The essay frequently repeats the prompt's wording rather than expanding on the ideas. For instance, the second paragraph merely restates that students should focus on main subjects without providing a convincing rationale. The conclusion is also repetitive and fails to synthesize the arguments effectively. To improve, you should focus on developing distinct, logical points for each side of the argument and provide specific, real-world examples to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and often circular. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, such as the repetitive use of 'Similarly' and 'In other words' which do not always connect the ideas logically. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that subsequent sentences build upon that idea using a variety of linking words and referencing techniques.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on words directly taken from the prompt (e.g., 'subjects', 'attention', 'qualification'). There are several spelling errors, such as 'unviersity', 'socre', 'amrks', 'impottant', 'contrasy', and 'quallified'. These errors, combined with the limited range of vocabulary, make the writing feel basic. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of academic vocabulary and synonyms to express your ideas more precisely. Focus on learning collocations and ensuring that your spelling is accurate, as frequent errors can impede the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'other believe'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, which can cause difficulty for the reader. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. The majority of the sentences contain errors, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and proofreading your work to catch simple grammatical slips.
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