Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many higher education institution students would to like learn about another subjects meanwhile to their major moduls. Others argue it is more beneficial to give all their time and pay attention to studying for a degree. I believe that although students have to attention to studying for a qualification because if they focus on their skills they can be better compare to learn their main subjects.
On the one hand, if people focus on themselves skill they will be better and also if they practise more for a qualification they can learn main and other subject during the attention to studying for cerficate. For example, human want to take cerficate and he look at all attention for qualification. In addition, they can get knowledge from other subject little a bit. In the Unated State of America, more population would like to grow their understanding and also they do not want to notice primary topic.
On the other hand, most of the students want to study deeply the central subjects, additionally they focus on only one subject. However, they do not want to look at the other subjects or degree like this. As a consequence, teenagers stay the same level they don't want to increase. However, if education institution students would like pay attention to qualification or degree by these degree they might learn another new information.
In conclusion, at present days pupils are becoming focus on single subject, I believe that if they have change they have to study 2 or 3 cources this leads to be successful and get a lot of new knowledge.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
Javobingiz bahsning har ikki tomonini qamrab oladi va shaxsiy fikringizni bildiradi, bu esa topshiriqning asosiy talablariga javob beradi. Biroq, g‘oyalar ko‘pincha noaniq yoki chalkash ifodalangan, masalan, talabalar nima uchun ko‘nikmalarga e’tibor qaratishlari kerakligi haqidagi tushuntirish yoki 'Unated State of America' haqidagi misol. G‘oyalarning rivojlanishi cheklangan va mantiqni kuzatib borish ko‘pincha qiyin, bu esa javobingizning yuqoriroq band olishiga to‘sqinlik qiladi. Yaxshilash uchun har bir xatboshi aniq, markaziy mavzu gapiga ega ekanligiga va qo‘llab-quvvatlovchi dalillaringiz topshiriq bilan mantiqiy bog‘langanligiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Insho xatboshilarga ajratilgan, bu ijobiy qadam. Biroq, g‘oyalarning rivojlanishi ko‘pincha uzuq-yuluq va bog‘lovchi vositalardan foydalanish ko‘pincha mexanik yoki noto‘g‘ri. Masalan, 'On the one hand' o‘tish iborasi ishlatilgan, ammo undan keyingi dalil oldingi xatboshi bilan aniq qarama-qarshi qo‘yilmagan. Havola qilish ham muammoli, chunki 'they' yoki 'these degree' nimaga ishora qilayotgani ko‘pincha noaniq. Yaxshilash uchun o‘tish so‘zlaridan tabiiyroq foydalanishga e’tibor qarating va har bir gap oldingisidan mantiqan kelib chiqishiga ishonch hosil qiling.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Lug‘at boyligi ancha cheklangan va so‘z tanlash hamda imloda tez-tez xatolarga yo‘l qo‘yilgan, masalan, 'moduls', 'cerficate' va 'Unated State'. Ba’zi iboralar noqulay, masalan, 'human want to take cerficate' yoki 'little a bit'. Bu xatolar ba’zida o‘quvchining siz aytmoqchi bo‘lgan fikringizni tushunishini qiyinlashtiradi. Yaxshilash uchun akademik o‘qish bilan bog‘liq umumiy kollokatsiyalarni o‘rganish ustida ishlashingiz va eng ko‘p ishlatadigan so‘zlaringizning imlosini mashq qilishingiz kerak. Lug‘at boyligingizni aniqroq akademik atamalar bilan kengaytirish ham foydali bo‘ladi.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Insho oddiy gap tuzilmalariga tayanadi va matn davomida tez-tez grammatik xatolar uchraydi. Umumiy muammolarga noto‘g‘ri fe’l shakllari ('would to like learn'), tushib qolgan artikllar va ega-kesim moslashuvi xatolari (masalan, 'pupils are becoming focus') kiradi. Murakkab gap tuzilmalaridan foydalanishga urinishlar bo‘lgan, ammo ular ko‘pincha noto‘g‘ri, bu esa muloqotga to‘sqinlik qilishi mumkin. Yaxshilash uchun asosiy gap qurilishini, xususan, ega-kesim moslashuvi va predloglarning to‘g‘ri ishlatilishini mukammal o‘zlashtirishga e’tibor qarating. Ergash gaplar yoki bog‘lovchilar yordamida murakkab gaplarni qanday tuzishni ko‘rib chiqish ham ballingizni oshirishga yordam beradi.
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