Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
FEW UNIVERSITIES PUPIL WANT TO GRASP REGARDING THE OTHER SUBJECTS IN ADDITION TO THEIR RESPECTIVE SUBJECTS. OTHER BELIEVE IT IS MUCH ESSENTIAL TO GIVE ALL THEIR TIME PAY ATTENTION TO STUDYING FOR A QUALIFICATION. I'M GOING TO DESCRIBE BOTH OF MY VIEWS AND MY OWN OPINION.
TO BEGINS WITH,LEARN THE OTHER ADDITIONAL SUBJECT IS PLAY VITAL ROLE IN THE ENHANCE THE KNOWLEDGE ABOUT OTHER SUBJECT. IN FUTURE PEOPLE GET MORE OPORTUNITIES IN THE JOBS IT HELPS THE MASSES TO BUILT THE ECONOMIC GROWTH MOREOVER WILL POWER TO HUMAN THAT I HAVE MORE KNOWLEDGE ABOUT OTHER SUBJECTS.
ADDITIONALLY, I COMMENCE WITH THE OTHER POINT OF VIEW THAT IS THE OTHER BLIEVE THAT IT IS VERY IMPORTANT TO FOCUS ON THE MAIN SUBJECTS. SOMETIME PUPIL DONT HAVE MUCH TIME FOR STUDYING THE OTHER SUBJECTS. NOWADAYS PEOPLE HAVE PLENITY OF TIME IN THE BUSY ERA SO THEY COULD NOT MAINTAIN THEIR TIME TABLE SO THEY LOSE THE GOOD MARKS IN OTHER SUBJECTS .ON THE OTHER HAND STUDENTS ARE PAY ATTENTION TO THE ADDITIONAL SUBJECT SO THATS WHY THEY ALSO MISS THE LECTURES OF OTHER SUBJECTS .SO, STUDENTS SHOULD FOCUS ON THE MAIN SUBJECTS RATHER THAN OTHER.
WITH MY ON OPINON ADDITIONAL SUBJECTS MAKES THE MORE OPTIONS FOR FUTURE JOBS. SO IT INCREASE THE PERCENTAGE IN THE FINAL EXAMINTAION.EXAMPLES FROM MY OWN EXPERIENCE IS I WAS CHOOSE THE MATHEMATICS AS ADDITIONAL SUBJECT THE I GOT THE JOB AS A SCIENCE TEACHER AND ADDITIONALLY I WAS TEACHED MATHEMATICS SO I GOT EXTRA PAY FOR TEACHING THE MATHEMATICS.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. For instance, the argument regarding economic growth is vague, and the explanation of why students should focus on main subjects is repetitive and lacks logical depth. The personal example provided is relevant but lacks sufficient detail to fully support the argument. To improve, you should aim to expand your points with more specific explanations and clearer logical links between your ideas and the prompt's core question.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Additionally', they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not effectively link the sentences. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a more cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'grasp regarding' instead of 'grasping' or 'understand', and 'plenity' instead of 'plenty'. Some phrases are also awkward, such as 'will power to human'. To reach a higher band, you need to work on using a broader range of vocabulary, including collocations and less common academic terms, while ensuring that your word choices are accurate and appropriate for the context of an academic essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'learn the other additional subject is play vital role'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity expected at higher levels. While you attempt to use some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading your work to eliminate simple errors in punctuation and word order.
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