Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
These days, learners want to learn additonal new subjects for their personal growth and learn new thing . while some believe that addional subject just waste their time instead of this put all time to study foe their qualification.
On the one hand, learning new subjects is benifical for personal growth and aid to learners could aquire new skill for additonal subjects. Altough these type of subject assist to learn new skill and making career oppurtunity in this feild. For instance, if student learn new skill like digital markiting, it is help to genrate good sourece of income for secure their future.
On the other hand, additional subjectes dithe student
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 110 words and remaining unfinished. While the writer attempts to introduce both views regarding university students learning additional subjects versus focusing solely on their qualification, the ideas are severely underdeveloped due to the premature ending. For instance, the mention of digital marketing provides a relevant example, but the second viewpoint is cut off mid-sentence ('additional subjectes dithe student'). Because the task is incomplete and significantly under-length, the response addresses the prompt only minimally, which severely limits the overall task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text begins with standard signposts such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand', which show an awareness of paragraph structure and logical organization. However, because the response cuts off abruptly in the second body paragraph, it is impossible to demonstrate a fully coherent overall progression or adequate closure. Paragraphing is attempted, but the abrupt termination means the logical development of ideas breaks down completely before the argument can be fully articulated. Cohesive devices are used mechanically at the start, but the lack of completion prevents a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, featuring frequent spelling errors such as 'additonal', 'benifical', 'aquire', 'Altough', 'oppurtunity', 'feild', 'markiting', 'genrate', and 'sourece'. There are also awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'put all time to study' and 'make career oppurtunity'. While the writer attempts some less common academic vocabulary like 'personal growth' and 'qualification', the high density of lexical errors and limited range restrict the score to this band, though the core meaning of the opening sentences is still mostly understandable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent errors. Examples include 'while some believe that addional subject just waste their time instead of this put all time to study foe their qualification' and 'if student learn new skill like digital markiting, it is help to genrate good sourece of income'. Errors involve missing articles, incorrect verb forms, faulty subject-verb agreement, and prepositions. These errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, and the grammatical control deteriorates further as the text ends in an ungrammatical fragment.
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