Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

First of all, i would like to introduce the option that the university had gave to the students because it is those place where we face quit bit challenges of our life and this encourage us to do something special in our life.

In my opnion, i am agree to that the main aim of every university student should acquire their major qualification because this would help in to get various job opporunitry in his relavent field of education.

In the first case we are discuss about those university students that had want to gain a knowledge of number of subjects in addition to their subject because they thought that if they had learna various thing at a time these are become a benefical in future and they do many thins at a single time. I remembered that one of my best friend Mr. Ali was conduct mulitple education task along with his acdamic degree at the end he achieved lower CGPA in this master.

On the otherhand, those students who are fully concentrate on their main subject and are not take interset in different field because they know very well if they do multiple things at a time that might be harmful for them. When i was gone a board for education some of my freinds adviced me to learn the online trading to met my expenses but i am ignored their adviced and now i get a high profile job in my field.

In conclusion, i believe that a student always concentering on his qualification for academic success .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—learning multiple subjects versus focusing solely on a main qualification—and presents a clear personal opinion that students should focus on their major. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding the friend Mr. Ali who achieved a lower CGPA is a relevant personal example, but it is underdeveloped and lacks wider exploration. Similarly, the conclusion summarises the position, but overall the ideas remain simple and require deeper elaboration to reach higher bands. Because the prompt's requirements are met and both views plus an opinion are present, this effort aligns well with Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some organizational structure, dividing the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion into discernible paragraphs. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical links between sentences are frequently faulty. Words like 'First of all, i would like to introduce...' and 'In the first case we are discuss about...' create a mechanical and unnatural flow. Referencing is often unclear, such as pronoun use and abrupt transitions between ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak and repetitive, making it challenging for the reader to follow a smooth logical argument. These features place the response firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0; Band 5.0 is awarded as there is a clear attempt at paragraphing and basic discourse markers.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, reflecting a limited range that is only minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common phrasing, such as 'major qualification' and 'high profile job', but these are accompanied by frequent errors in word choice and word formation, such as 'relavent', 'opporunitry', and 'concentering'. Furthermore, incorrect collocations like 'conduct mulitple education task' and 'met my expenses' cause noticeable strain for the reader. Spelling errors are scattered throughout the text. These lexical limitations and frequent inaccuracies restrict the response to Band 4.5 or 5.0; a Band 5.0 is given as the vocabulary is sufficient to convey a basic message despite the errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple structures and faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and basic punctuation throughout the text. Examples include 'the university had gave', 'i am agree to that', 'that had want to gain', and 'When i was gone a board'. These errors are dense and frequently cause difficulty for the reader, preventing clear comprehension of the intended meaning. Simple sentences occasionally appear intact, but the high frequency of grammatical breakdowns means the writing falls short of Band 6.0 descriptors, warranting a Band 4.5.

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