Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It has been observed lately that few of the univeristy going bachelor's are eager towards learning various other subjects as a plus instead of their own majors. However, some people have relatively different point of view regarding this and they urge that spending more time with own coursework will enhance skills and productivity promising a rewarding future. I believe that picking up numerous other minors can aid as a side skill later providing better employment opportunities and increasing knowledge. (personality0

There is a traditional belief that a student can excels in his life if he is focused and well-awared about the advances happening in his field which hopefully are directly connected to his professional growth. Better grades attract well established and well-known firms recruiters to hire such students on priority. For instance, a studednt who starts his career with a market competitive firm will not only makes a good reputation but also become financially stable, making personal bondings, more

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the required length, containing only 159 words compared to the minimum of 250 words. Because of this severe under-length, the task cannot be fully developed. While the student introduces both views and attempts to provide an opinion—mentioning that learning minors can aid as a side skill—the discussion remains extremely truncated and underdeveloped. The body paragraphs are cut short, and the second view is barely sketched out before the text ends abruptly. Consequently, the response only minimally addresses the prompt, leading to a low score under task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text demonstrates some basic organisational structure by opening with an introduction that outlines the two views and a personal stance, followed by a body paragraph. However, because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence ('...making personal bondings, more'), the overall progression is severely disrupted. Cohesive devices are used minimally (e.g., 'However', 'For instance'), but referencing and paragraphing break down due to the abrupt ending of the text. There is no concluding paragraph, which limits the structural completeness of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'market competitive firm', 'financial stable', and 'univeristy going bachelor's', but these are often affected by word choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'univeristy going bachelor's' instead of undergraduate students, 'well-awared' instead of well-aware, and 'personal bondings'). Spelling errors also occur, such as 'studednt'. The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive in places, though the basic meaning is mostly conveyed despite the lexical inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'There is a traditional belief that a student can excels in his life if he is focused...'. However, grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors including subject-verb agreement issues ('a student can excels'), awkward phrasing, and preposition misuse. Furthermore, the text contains unfinished sentences and structural breaks, particularly at the end where the response trails off. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect limited command of complex structures.

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