Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people opine that, plenty of university students want to about other subjects . Some postulate that , more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification . In the forthcoming paragraph , I have disscused both the view and provided my opinion at the end .

On the one hand , education provided by university more focuse on others creative topics. whenever university shuold organise online workshop with forigen student as result student improve their language of knwladge and they gain some use full skils such as, communications skill leadership skill and dicison making skiils . Furthermore , univercity cunduct scince fare project like making humanbody system and as result student can improve their level of knowladge and gain some prectical knowladge not rely on theorical knowladge .

On the other hand , student and university should focuse om their acadamics rather than others activity as student improve thier leval of knowalage in their perticuller fild and create good score in exam. For example , student who have good knowladge about their fild it help to taking placement at famouse company , high package job in their fild as result they improve their quality of life and became independent .

In my opinion student should focuse on other acticity such as digital marketing trading and this type of skiil help to create carrer on this fild and people who have good knowladge about trading and forex market they can easliy earn money and start new carrer in this fild as result this people became indipend and financial strong .

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To agglomerate , student should focuse on their acadamics as result they have good knowlade about their fild and doing good job in this fild. moreover student focuse on others activity as result they can improve their skills such as comunication skills and many more .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both views required by the prompt regarding whether university students should study other subjects or focus solely on their main qualifications, and the student provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding skill acquisition and career benefits. Phrases like 'Some people opine that, plenty of university students want to about other subjects' contain missing lexical items, making the ideas under-developed and difficult to follow fully. While a position is presented in the conclusion and body paragraphs, the reasoning lacks depth and relies on broad generalizations rather than fully elaborated examples. Consequently, the performance aligns best with the criteria for a band 5.0, where the task is addressed but ideas remain limited and partially unclear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs representing different views, a personal opinion paragraph, and a concluding summary. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by mechanical and faulty use of cohesive devices, such as repeating 'as result' throughout the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is disjointed, and referencing is often unclear, as seen in the sentence 'In the forthcoming paragraph , I have disscused both the view and provided my opinion at the end.' There is a lack of smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs, leading to a choppy reading experience. These features are characteristic of band 5.0, where some organization is present, but overall progression lacks clarity and cohesive devices are used inadequately or repetitively.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained by frequent word choice and spelling errors, such as 'disscused', 'forigen', 'knwladge', 'univercity', 'cunduct', 'scince', 'prectical', 'theorical', 'acadamics', 'perticuller', 'became', and 'indipend'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'digital marketing trading' and 'forex market', but these are marred by inaccurate collocations and persistent spelling mistakes. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic, but noticeable errors cause frequent difficulty for the reader and strain comprehension. This vocabulary profile firmly corresponds to band 4.0 or a weak band 5.0; however, granting the benefit of the doubt for attempt at topic-related terms, a band 5.0 is appropriate due to the severe strain placed on the reader by frequent errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. Punctuation is misused throughout, notably with excessive and misplaced spaces before commas and periods (e.g., 'Some postulate that , more important...'). There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and tense inconsistencies, such as 'university more focuse on others creative topics' and 'student who have good knowladge about their fild it help to taking placement'. These errors occur in almost every sentence and frequently cause difficulty and confusion for the reader. Because complex structures are almost universally faulty and basic grammar rules are frequently breached, the writing falls into the band 4.0 category for grammatical range and accuracy.

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