Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Many university studenst want learn about studies main subjects and other students beleive has been important spend all time and attention for a qualification.I think so both subjects are depended on their qualification.

overall, some university students face intense problem with teachers and principle.how to want learning the subjects. also people it is important to get her time and be attentive to learning for a hight qualification.

In recent years, some university improve their focus on the subjects how to studenst want main subjects and other sunjects. but, Education system in worldwide has been marked rise in students learning.consequently, it has been develop more and more teachers teach to students all subjects.one major cause of students behaviour is very bad in learing others subjects. to reduce this problem, Acombined effort between main subjects and other subjects is essential.

However,students was growing engaed both subjects.Suc as, many countries engaged how to studenst want like. some students was good in studeis ad some students has been excellent in physicall activites and smany students was interested in many technology .Frequently, for example german country is very successfull for others countries because how to want syudents like student grow up and read out mind where in this mind. but, he has ben given output in your mind. finally, teacher was learning to student and it take their student mind and student growing and should be very honourable perosn for persnall life and get enjoyable.

in conclusion.i really appriciate like some countries its has been students read the mind and then develop the growing mind.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response touches upon the prompt regarding university students learning other subjects versus focusing solely on their main qualification, and it attempts to present an opinion. However, the ideas are extremely limited and under-developed, preventing a clear and sustained discussion. Throughout the text, the arguments lack clarity and logical extension. For instance, the mention of students facing intense problems with teachers and principles, or references to Germany as a country that 'reads out mind', do not adequately address the prompt in a coherent or cohesive manner. The position of the writer is unclear, and the points made are frequently tangential or obscured by severe language limitations. To move to a higher level, the response would need to directly address both views with fully extended and supported ideas, ensuring that every point contributes to a clear, well-supported position throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The text shows some attempts at paragraphing, but overall, information and ideas are not arranged coherently. There is a lack of clear progression throughout the response, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. While some basic cohesive devices like 'However', 'For example', and 'in conclusion' are used, they are frequently inadequate or mechanically applied, failing to create a logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Referencing is often unclear, such as the sudden shifts between students, teachers, and countries without proper transitional framing. To improve in this area, the writer needs to ensure that ideas are logically sequenced, that each paragraph has a clear central topic, and that cohesive devices are used accurately to establish clear relationships between sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic and repetitive, utilizing high-frequency words and simple terms. There are numerous noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling, such as 'studenst', 'beleive', 'hight', 'sunjects', 'engaed', 'physicall', and 'appriciate'. These lexical errors and inappropriate word choices often strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning. The range of vocabulary is strictly limited and minimally adequate at best. To achieve a higher band score, the writer must expand their lexical range by incorporating less common vocabulary, improving spelling accuracy, and demonstrating better control over word formation and collocation in academic contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily restricted, featuring a very limited range of structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at more complex structures are almost invariably faulty, resulting in frequent errors that cause severe difficulty for the reader. There are widespread issues with verb forms and tenses (e.g., 'has been important spend', 'students was growing engaed'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and pervasive punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after full stops. These errors frequently distort meaning and impede communication. To progress, the writer needs to practice basic sentence construction, ensure correct subject-verb agreement and verb tense usage, and build control over a mix of simple and complex sentence forms with fewer errors.

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