Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some university student want to learn other subjects than own additional subjects while some other student believed that to give all their time and attenttion to study for a education are very important thing. Therefore, we will discuss related this and will share own opinion here.
The primary reason why I agree from this statement give time and full attention in anything bring a success. So that's why in education gives full attention and proper time are very beneficial. For instance, some people believe that which subjects that consider are difficult them need much attention in these subject. Because without its success in studying is not possible.If we want to built a sucsessful career and education background then we should accepted these rules.
Another compelling reason which I support from firmly, that some university student want to learn another subject from own subjects these are many several reason. For example, some people are very weak in own subjects so that's why they want chage own subjects. On the other hand some people want to learn new skills, activities, and other objects therefore, they choose these sujects than own fix subjects and in the same way some people want to built and fix own skill only in one subject.
In conculsion, and in my prespectation,opinion If anyperson want to learn new subject in addition to their main subject then they give more attention and time in own study. Because without its no one can reach own distinations. Therefore time attention are very essantial for get a huge achievement in any subject.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt only partially, fulfilling the requirement to discuss both views and give an opinion, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the writer states that some students want to learn other subjects because they are weak in their own or want to learn new skills, but these points are stated rather than extended with specific, clear examples. The position is discernible—expressing agreement with giving full attention to studies—but the overall development lacks depth and clarity throughout the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is some basic organisation with a four-paragraph structure, but the response lacks clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, yet the internal flow between sentences is disrupted by mechanical and repetitive use of cohesive devices, such as repeatedly using phrases like 'For example' and 'On the other hand' without creating smooth logical transitions. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of arguments from one sentence to the next.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are frequent noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form, such as writing 'student' instead of 'students', 'attenttion', 'sucsessful', 'chage', 'conculsion', 'prespectation', and 'distinations'. These lexical inaccuracies and occasional awkward collocations cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writer employs a limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are recurrent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'Some university student want', 'agree from this statement', 'subjects that consider are difficult them', and 'give more attention and time in own study'. These frequent errors require the reader to slow down and can cause difficulty, keeping the grammar score at this level.
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