Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The number of university student want to learn vairity extra criculm subjects other than main academic subjects, while other opine that concenrating and submerting into learning main subject is good for qualification. In my view, garthering knowledge for additional subject can provide an individual extra set of skills which might open muliple opportunities, nevertheless giving time and effort on main subject can make strong foundation of knowledge and can leads toward mastering it.
Admittedly, learning additional subject other than main can be handy in this economy, providing an individual with extra set of skill can open the door to multiple oppurtunity, countering the unemployment rate which leads to massive financial gain by having multiple jods at once. Consequently, learning an addiational subject is tend to increase an individual's knowledge which can give an individual advantage or able to do multitasking. For intances, doctors with additional subject of hospital management
On the other hand, concenrating on main subject can lead an individual toward mastering it, giving all time and effort on the main subject can make strong foundation which open the chance of field specific study, understanding of main subjects can that student an expert on that purticular field. Considerably, main subject focus more on tactical jobs which required comptele understanding of that job and have basic knowledge about it. For example, orthopedic doctor which completely focus on bones
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task partially, discussing both views and giving a position, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the introduction outlines the two perspectives, and body paragraphs attempt to explore the benefits of additional subjects and main subjects respectively, but both arguments trail off abruptly without full extension or clear examples, such as the incomplete sentence regarding doctors and hospital management. Furthermore, the response is incomplete in length, as it contains only 229 words, thus failing to meet the minimum requirement of 250 words. To reach a higher band, the writer must ensure the word count requirement is fulfilled and develop each main idea fully with relevant explanations and completed examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay displays some organisation with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and an abrupt attempt at a conclusion, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are sometimes repetitive, inaccurate, or inadequate, such as the excessive use of 'consequently' and 'considerably' to link sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final conclusion is truncated, stopping abruptly at 'To'. To improve, the writer needs to ensure logical links are used naturally and varied effectively, while also completing all structural components of the essay, including a fully formed concluding paragraph that summarises the main points.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic ideas related to university education. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that cause some difficulty for the reader, such as 'vairity', 'extra criculm', 'concenrating', 'submerting', 'garthering', 'muliple', 'oppurtunity', and 'jods'. These inaccuracies stem from attempts to use less common vocabulary without sufficient mastery of spelling and word forms. To progress to a higher level, the student must expand their active vocabulary, pay closer attention to standard spelling conventions, and ensure that word choices accurately reflect the intended meaning in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing demonstrates a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'The number of university student want', missing articles such as 'in this economy' and 'with extra set of skill', and incorrect verb forms like 'can leads toward' and 'is tend to increase'. Punctuation is also problematic, with sentences running on or trailing off incomplete. To achieve a higher band, the writer must use a wider variety of complex grammatical structures accurately and eliminate frequent errors in agreement, articles, and verb tenses.
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