Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many universities students want to learn about other subjects in future to their main books. But others think it is more important to give all thier time and attention to studying books for qualification. I think this is important to give their time to study for a qualification.

First of all, In my oppinion and observation when students learn and give their time to attention and studing for a qualification. It is more important in future because nowadays the world have a great changes day by day. In the past time some things are avaliable because in past no banks and hospitals becaue every person not know treatments and how get money from banks. But these days in our country every things are avaliable students received a lesson from school teachers and AI. so that is way, For example, when students study for qualification and spent their time . He also get a great knowledge from schools and youtube. THUS, students always give thier time to studying for good qualifications.

Secondly, others universities students want to learn about many others books in addition to thier main subject. When students learn new and other subject they are not always fouces their own books. For instance, when studens chose I.com and they do learn FA books they do not foces on their I.com study and at the result they fail their books. THUS, students always foces their own study.

In my opinion, I also support these students that belive is more important to give all their time to study for qualification. That is the main reason they gets a good job in future and spend their life very happy.

In conclusion, students aslo fouces their own study they chose and not many other books. Some students study and give their time for qualification so it is a very positive development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear opinion in the introduction and conclusion: you support focusing on a qualification. You also mention both views, including the example of students dividing attention between I.com and FA studies. However, the discussion is only partial: the benefits of learning additional subjects are not explained, and the argument for concentrating on a qualification relies mainly on general claims about future jobs and knowledge. The examples about banks, hospitals, schools and AI are difficult to connect to the question, so they do not adequately support the main points. Develop each side with a relevant reason and a specific example, and explain why your preferred approach is more convincing. The response contains 16 words copied from the task prompt; these were not counted in the reported total.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “First of all,” “Secondly” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the essay. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from qualifications to historical access to banks and hospitals, then to AI and YouTube without showing how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “Thus” are repeated and sometimes introduce a conclusion that does not follow clearly from the example. References such as “these students” and “their own study” can also be vague. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, explain it in sequence, and use linking expressions only where the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to education, including “qualification,” “main subject,” “attention” and “knowledge,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “study,” “books” and “students.” Inaccurate word choice and collocation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “learn about other subjects in future to their main books” and “give their time to attention” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also frequent spelling errors, including “oppinion,” “avaliable,” “fouces” and “thier.” Build a more precise set of education-related expressions, check spelling carefully, and choose words that accurately describe the contrast between broad learning and specialisation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “When students learn new and other subject they are not always fouces their own books.” However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction recur. Examples include “the world have a great changes,” “students received a lesson,” and “they gets a good job.” Some sentences are also incomplete or awkwardly joined, as in “For example, when students study for qualification and spent their time.” These errors can make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with clear subjects and correctly matched verbs, articles and tenses.

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