Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few students want to learn various subjects along with their main subjects, while some students thinks that all the importance and time would give only studying for a qualification rather than other subjects. I would discuss both views about the studying main subjects or doing some more activities along with studies, and give my opinion.

To commence with, students should learn about new subjects as the technology has changed, they should have knowledge about other subjects. To elloborate it, as we are in and advance technological system the education system has been changed over the time, and student should not stuck only on main subjects they should learn about other subjects for their advancements. For instance, im learning the Computer science and doing major subjects along with i did some extra subjects which are related to our study and give us information. Thus, we should learn the extra subject for extra knowledge which lead us to better future.

Furthermore, other students wants only focus to the major subject for the qualifications. In other words, they have right to do focus on only major subjects, becuase other subject canbe more stressfull and some students are not willing to face the overload in studies. For example, some students are weak in study and they are not able to study other subjects. Hence, they should focus on only one goal.

In my opinion, Students should get the other subjects too, becuase other subjects provide you more learning things which can help you for your future and even you get sucessfull.

In conclusion, students should focus on their studies and also take a part of other subjects which can help them in personal as well as profeesional life in future. Only degree is not matter you should have some other knowledge and skills for sucess.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for studying additional subjects, especially in “In my opinion, Students should get the other subjects too.” The discussion of the first view is relevant, and the example about studying computer science and taking related extra subjects helps make it personal. However, the reasons are often broad or unclear: the link between technological change and learning other subjects is not fully explained, and the opposing view is supported mainly by saying some students are weak or may feel overloaded. Develop each side with a more specific consequence or example, and explain more directly how extra subjects complement a qualification. This would make the response more fully developed and balanced.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To commence with,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” make the stages easy to identify. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, with repeated links such as “For instance” and “Thus,” and some references are unclear. For example, “which are related to our study and give us information” does not specify what the subjects provide, while the conclusion repeats the opinion without adding a distinct synthesis. Use fewer formulaic transitions and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports. Clearer referencing and development within paragraphs would make the argument flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to education, including “qualification,” “technological system,” “overload,” and “professional life,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes meaning less precise. Phrases such as “all the importance and time would give only studying” and “get the other subjects” are difficult to interpret naturally; “focus to the major subject” is also an awkward combination. Spelling errors such as “elloborate,” “becuase,” and “sucessfull” further affect accuracy. Build a bank of natural academic phrases for discussing study choices, and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause in “because other subject canbe more stressfull” and a relative clause in “which can help them in personal as well as profeesional life.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries occur throughout. For example, “some students thinks” should use a plural verb, while “students should not stuck” needs an auxiliary and a participle. The opening sentence also combines ideas in a way that obscures the intended meaning. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and a clearly attached supporting clause, then check subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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