Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

At university, some students preer to learn about other subjects alongside their main subject,while other argue that focusing on qualifiaction is much important.While focusing on one main subject is important for career,I believe that giving attention to the other subjects make them to grow better in practical world.

Looking the case who focus only on one subjects become limitted to that specific area and theiir mind didnot develop such broad In contrast to someone who has been activily participating indifferent shool,college subjects despite of the main course.

It is often argue that multi skilled person can survie anywhere in any situation in comparison to someone who have never did brainstroming to find answers related to different fields,However this person may have met failure many times but these failures have given him such a confidence to overcome the little random side effects.

Furthermore the different areas knowledge have made him multiskilled.My brother is epitome of this he have studied agriculture as main degree course rather than doing agriculture he has did sociology in many different languages so he have not only informatin about their culture and norms but also about their languaes.

However it has never been easy form him to do so but onceit is dine its has improve hima lot even through his behaviour improvement.

In conclusion I would say we all should need to do studies about other subjects in addition to our main courses',In my view despite the fact that it will never be easy but we all have to leave our confortzone to be successful.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both perspectives: the opening contrasts learning additional subjects with concentrating on a qualification, and your conclusion clearly supports studying beyond the main course. The example of your brother, who studied agriculture and also learned sociology and languages, is relevant and helps illustrate your view. However, the argument for focusing exclusively on a qualification is only briefly introduced and is not explained with a reason or example. Your own position is present, but the claim that broader study helps people “grow better in practical world” remains general, and the brother’s example is difficult to follow in places. Develop both sides more evenly and explain specifically how additional subjects benefit students, while also acknowledging the value of specialist study.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable overall structure: you introduce the debate, give reasons for broader learning, provide a personal example, and conclude with your opinion. Connectors such as “In contrast,” “Furthermore,” and “However” show an effort to guide the reader. However, progression between ideas is not consistently clear. The paragraph beginning “Looking the case” has an unclear comparison, and the shift from general claims about failure and confidence to your brother’s experience is abrupt. Several ideas are crowded into long sentences, while paragraphing does not clearly separate the two views. Use one paragraph for each position, then a separate example and conclusion, and make references such as “this person” explicit so the reader can follow the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “qualification,” “multi skilled,” “brainstorming,” “culture and norms,” and “comfort zone.” These choices show an effort to express ideas beyond very basic language. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts difficult to understand, for example “preer,” “limitted,” “survie,” and “inform atin.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “grow better in practical world” and “little random side effects.” Aim for accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully. Prefer clear, natural collocations over ambitious phrases whose meaning is uncertain; this will make your points about transferable skills and personal development more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including contrast clauses beginning “While” and “despite,” and you use a conditional-style comparison to discuss different students. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “other argue” needs subject–verb agreement, while “he have studied” and “he has did” use incorrect verb forms. The sentence beginning “Looking the case” is also incomplete or incorrectly formed, and several sentences run together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause, checking agreement and verb forms.

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