Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Study play important role in our lives and cariers. Its make our life easy or difficult.If we choose wrong direction in studies its puts us in troubles.So always choose intelligent and straight way to pick up your goal.

In my point of view student may able to decide thier direction first. if their has a ability to manage the other subjects easily and it can not be affected in your study its should b choose other subjects. on the other hand if you have no ability to complete your subject relevant task. you should go with your subject and acheive your goals.

study take important role in your life and and other circumstances.you should pay full attention to studying for qualification.but if i discus abiut our era, we have to study other subjets instead of main subjects .Beacuse its for us

For example your main subject is biology . you just focus on biology its not benefical for us. you should also study computer subject because its very usefull now a days. Its covered all fields.its covered hospitality , general stores , offices , marketing. meanwhile its covered all areas. so if study both your main subjects with other subject its make easy for you .its helpfull to acheiving your goals and take chance to enhance your ability

knowledge never be waist. it shoul be usefull in every field of life .so, conculion is that you will experience both if you convinient and easily manage your time and task.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a general opinion that students should study additional subjects when they can manage them, while prioritising their qualification if they cannot. The biology-and-computing example is relevant and begins to explain the value of learning beyond a main subject. However, the two views are not discussed in a balanced or clearly developed way: the case for concentrating exclusively on a qualification receives little explanation, and your position shifts from conditional advice to saying students should study both. The conclusion repeats this idea without resolving the conditions. The response is also one word below the required minimum. Develop each view with a reason and a specific example, then state a consistent opinion and explain it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response, moving from an introduction to your view, an example, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “on the other hand,” “For example,” and “so” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because paragraphs are not clearly formed and several points are repeated, especially the claim that studying other subjects is useful. Some connections are unclear: “Beacuse its for us” does not complete the preceding idea, and the conclusion does not clearly follow from the earlier conditional position. Use one paragraph for each view, followed by a paragraph stating your opinion, and make each sentence explain or support the paragraph’s main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “qualification,” “main subject,” “manage your time,” and “enhance your ability,” and the computing example gives you a chance to discuss practical benefits. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “study,” “subject,” “important,” and “usefull.” Several word choices or collocations are unclear, such as “choose intelligent and straight way,” “study take important role,” and “knowledge never be waist.” Spelling errors, including “car iers,” “acheive,” “benefical,” and “conculion,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise vocabulary for comparing academic focus with broader learning, and check spelling and natural word combinations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer structures, including conditional sentences such as “if their has a ability to manage the other subjects” and a contrast introduced by “on the other hand.” This shows an effort to express conditions and compare ideas. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “Study play important role” and “its make our life easy or difficult” lack correct subject–verb agreement, while “if study both your main subjects with other subject its make easy for you” has an unclear structure. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “if,” “because,” and “while.”

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