Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

At present many students thought that we should read the other subject and along with major subject should read. Becasue student learn more new skills and a focus on qulification. I strongly believe discuss about both biews.

Nowadays, many students deemed it. Should read the other subject because he read for learn new skills and idea.Furthermore, if we read other subject they can helps in futur jobs.Some students when they go to interview they does no ask the question related this subject although, they ask the question about general knowledge and history.for example if one student made doctor and its not mendatory he will get the job in medical field but, they learn other subject and grow carrier in different field information technology banking and finance.

On the other hand some students claims that we should focus on subject. wherease if we will learn well. And we will earn well in our fields. Firstly, we want to understand the subject than if we will enough time and we can learn. We should complete dominant for our subject.For instence, although, we want to prefer out subject if we will do the practical and we make wiell our fields.Secondly, many people dominant of our skills and they does not lose in life in future conflict.

In conclusion, in universty students understand that we should necesssary to learn new skills and earn well in the future like as social media platerfarm and focus on one skils and expert his field. I believe that both views are well because skill and main subject both are crucial part of our life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the discussion: the first body paragraph argues that studying other subjects can build skills and broaden job options, while the next explains the value of concentrating on a main subject. Your final sentence also gives an opinion that both are important. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening says you “strongly believe discuss about both views,” without stating what you believe, and the conclusion does not explain how students should balance the two. Several supporting points are difficult to follow, such as the example about a medical student moving into banking or finance. Develop fewer ideas more clearly, with a relevant example and a direct explanation of how it supports each view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “Furthermore,” “On the other hand,” and “Firstly” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and some links are inaccurate or incomplete. For example, “Firstly, we want to understand the subject than if we will enough time” does not clearly connect the ideas, while “although” is used awkwardly in the example about practical work. References such as “it,” “they,” and “this subject” also make it hard to identify who or what is meant. Use shorter, logically complete sentences and make each paragraph develop one main point in sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “qualification,” “general knowledge,” “practical,” and “different field,” and you try to discuss skills and career opportunities. However, the range is limited and many word choices or forms make the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “dominant for our subject,” “grow carrier,” “focus on one skils,” and “social media platerfarm.” Spelling errors such as “Becasue,” “qulification,” and “universty” also reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms. Prefer precise expressions such as “specialise in a subject” or “broaden career opportunities” rather than translating ideas word by word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “if,” and “although.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors frequently make the intended relationships difficult to follow. For instance, “Because student learn more new skills and a focus on qulification” is a fragment, while “if we will learn well” uses an unsuitable verb form after “if.” There are also recurring problems with subject–verb agreement (“they does”), articles, and sentence boundaries. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that conditional clauses use consistent, appropriate forms.

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