Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some institutes student want ot learn more subjects including in their field subjects while other have not be able to learns new courses instead of paying full focus on relevant subjects. From my prospect, paying full attation on their felid subjects is better then adding new subjects in their degree because every students not be able to understand new skills. So they want to give full their time on relevaat courses to their field.

Firstly, creative ability is needed to learn extra things to gain extra knowledge. Whereas some learners have been more understanding skills. They able to maintain extra burden. As an illustration, they are toppers in class and to wants get higher jobs by geting higher knowledge. For example, If they have learn coding which is not related to their degree, their possibilty to get job in coding feild will increase. Also improve their cv by adding new skills.

Secondly, some learners have their limmited knowledge about their pervious study because of many reasons like their interest in study. So they do not want to learns extra things. If they started to learns other subjects, then more struggle were needed. For instance, pupils of low background knowledge, more focus and attention are needed to maintain their results. Morever, instead of adding new skills in their fields, they want to focus relevnat subjects only.

From my prospective, original fields skills as well as subjects are enough to get higher marks and maintain their results because some pupils are not be able to get higher burden. In addition, universities and schools make new rules for their teaching systems, which helps students to understand extra things as well as make new skills.

In conclusion, students at different teaching systems have been able to learns additional subjects. But if they wants to helps week student those are not creative skills and limmited knowledge to understand additional courses. If we improve our education system, then every students learn new skills from other subjects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both the appeal of studying additional subjects and the reasons some students concentrate on their degree, and your own preference for focusing on the main field is stated in the opening and revisited later. The coding example is relevant and shows how an extra subject might improve employment prospects. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the benefits of broader study are mostly reduced to gaining skills and improving a CV, while the case for concentrating on a qualification relies mainly on students having limited knowledge or finding extra work difficult. The final paragraph also introduces a claim about universities changing their teaching systems without explaining how this supports your position. Develop each view with clearer reasoning and examples, and make your conclusion directly summarise your opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, a paragraph stating your view, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within and between paragraphs is not consistently clear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from creative ability to high-achieving students and then to coding, without clearly connecting these points. The paragraph beginning “From my prospective” repeats the preference already given in the introduction, while its point about universities’ rules is not linked to the preceding reasoning. Some linking phrases, including “Whereas,” do not clearly express the relationship between ideas. Use topic sentences and clearer links so each paragraph develops one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “additional subjects,” “qualification,” “extra knowledge,” and “job prospects” (though the latter idea is expressed less naturally). These choices show an effort to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repeated expressions make meaning less clear, such as “creative ability is needed to learn extra things,” “higher burden,” and “original fields skills.” Spelling errors are also frequent, including “attation,” “pervious,” and “relevaat,” and some word forms are incorrect, as in “students want” and “geting.” Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing academic workload, transferable skills, and specialisation, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If they started to learns other subjects, then more struggle were needed,” and you use clauses to explain reasons. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout: “students want,” “they able to maintain,” “every students,” and “students … have been able to learns.” Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “paying full attation on their felid subjects is better then adding new subjects in their degree.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then build longer sentences from correct simple clauses. Proofread each sentence for tense, agreement, and punctuation.

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