Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some students in the university want to learn more subjects other than their main subject. They want it to add core subjects.

We people have differences, different wants, beliefs, qualities, and attitudes. In my perspective in this scenario is that having more subjects is good. Therefore it will help you truly deepen your understanding about life and you will learn more knowlegde in the subjects that you wanted to add in your main subjects. On the other hand, Some people are idle to study more subjects because they wanted to give all of their time and attention studying what is their main subject. In other words, they really valued their time and efforts and didn't want more subjects to study.

When i was in senior high school, we are obligated to choose more subjects that we wanted to add in our main subjects. My strand before was HUMSS means humanities and social sciences, wherein we have to study and learn about sciences, religions, creative in the 21st century. Not all my subjects are connected in the strand that i want but it helped me to gained more knowledge and most importantly experience.

Moreover, if you will add more subjects in addition to your main subjects, you will get a lot of experince, just what happened to me and it is one of the best things that happened to me. For letting myself to out of my comfort zone and stretch myself beyond my knowledge and limits.

In conlusion, if you want be qualified for something. Do it scared and do it outside your comfort zone. There is no comfort in the growth zone and their is no growth in the comfort zone, So choose wisely.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Malinaw mong ipinahayag na mas gusto mong mag-aral ng mga karagdagang asignatura, at nagbibigay ng angkop na personal na suporta ang halimbawa mo tungkol sa senior high school. Binanggit mo rin ang kabilang pananaw: mas gusto ng ilang estudyante na ituon ang kanilang oras at pagsisikap sa pangunahing asignatura. Gayunman, maikli lamang ang paliwanag sa pananaw na ito, at hindi lubusang tinatalakay ng sanaysay kung bakit maaaring mahalagang magtuon sa isang kwalipikasyon, gaya ng pagkakaroon ng espesyalisadong kaalaman o pagpapahusay ng mga oportunidad sa karera. Naipahayag mo ang sarili mong paninindigan, pero pangkalahatan ang payo sa konklusyon na “do it scared” at hindi nito tuwirang binubuod ang dalawang pananaw at ang pangangatwiran mo. Talakayin nang mas pantay ang magkabilang panig at malinaw na iugnay ang bawat halimbawa sa tanong.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

May makikilalang estruktura ang sagot, na binubuo ng panimula, talakayan, personal na halimbawa, at konklusyon. Nakatutulong ang paghahati sa mga talata para mapag-iba ang mahahalagang punto, at ipinapakita ng mga transisyong gaya ng “On the other hand,” “Moreover,” at “In conclusion” ang ugnayan ng mga ideya. Gayunman, hindi laging malinaw ang daloy: inuulit sa panimula ang ideya ng pagdaragdag ng mga asignatura, at nagkakapatong ang dalawang talatang sumusuporta sa opinyon mo. May ilang pang-ugnay na mekanikal o malabo, lalo na ang “Therefore it will help you,” dahil hindi tiyak kung ano ang tinutukoy ng “it.” Lumilihis din sa talakayan ng sanaysay ang panghuling siping nagbibigay-motibasyon. Ayusin ang katawan ng sanaysay sa pamamagitan ng paglalaan ng tig-isang talata para sa bawat pananaw, saka gamitin ang konklusyon para pag-isahin ang paninindigan mo.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Gumamit ka ng ilang angkop na bokabularyo, kabilang ang “main subject,” “time and attention,” “knowledge,” at “out of my comfort zone,” kaya karaniwang nauunawaan ang mga pangunahing ideya. Gayunman, limitado ang saklaw ng bokabularyo at may ilang salitang pinili o anyong hindi wasto o di-natural, gaya ng “idle to study more subjects,” “add core subjects,” at “gained more knowledge.” Nakababawas din sa kawastuhan ang mga maling baybay na “knowlegde,” “experince,” at “conlusion.” Dahil paulit-ulit ang paggamit sa “subjects,” “more,” at “knowledge,” hindi gaanong tiyak ang talakayan. Dagdagan ang mga pariralang partikular sa paksa tungkol sa akademikong pag-aaral at pagtutuon sa karera, at suriin ang baybay at mga kolokasyon habang nagrerebisa.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Sinubukan mong gumamit ng payak at mas komplikadong mga pangungusap, kabilang ang paghahambing na ipinapasok ng “On the other hand” at sugnay na nagsisimula sa “wherein.” Gayunman, hindi pare-pareho ang pagkontrol sa wika, at dahil sa madalas na pagkakamali, kung minsan ay mas mahirap sundan ang nais mong sabihin. Halimbawa, walang malinaw na simuno sa gramatika ang “In my perspective in this scenario is that,” samantalang mali ang paglipat mula sa nakaraan tungo sa kasalukuyan sa “When i was in senior high school, we are obligated.” May problema rin sa mga padron ng pandiwa at hangganan ng pangungusap, gaya ng “For letting myself to out of my comfort zone,” na hindi kumpletong pangungusap. Magsanay sa pagbuo ng kumpletong pangungusap, paggamit ng pare-parehong panahunan sa mga personal na halimbawa, at wastong mga padron ng pandiwa.

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