Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many university scholar interest to learn about different subjects in addition to their main topic,while other of think that it is more benifits to provide all their time and attention to studying for a degree.Meanwhile,the following essay would delve deeper in exploring the aforementioned arguments with relevant reasons as well as example before reaching a concrete decision

To begin with,number of scholar who interest to learn about different subject instead of main topic.A students who interest in sport like cricket and other so they can practice their sport and in future it will be very benificial for them,moreover they can focus and hard work to achieve their dream.For example a student who like to play cricket,if university provide special subject,so he can do more practice.it might be help for get chace to play other leage.Who students are interest to participant in olympic so they focus in both study and sport and increase their ability.

Furthermore,many of scholar believe that more benifits to provide their time and focus to studying for a degree.number of individual get admission in university for their qualification and placement so they believe that university can focus only academic subject.For example a student who want to get a high-level job so it definately focus their study rather than sport.Many students who do not have interest in sport and they believe sports are waste of time.

In conclusion,by recapitulating all the aforementioned view could be finaly reiterated that.In my opinion i agree with university provide extra subject for student growt

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views: the first body paragraph discusses students pursuing sport alongside their studies, while the second explains why some prioritise a qualification and employment. Your final sentence gives an opinion in favour of offering extra subjects, but it is incomplete and does not explain why this is your view. The examples are relevant, yet the discussion is limited and several points—such as how extra subjects benefit students beyond sport—are not developed. The response also falls 7 words short of the 250-word minimum; the 9 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, develop each view with a clear explanation and a specific example, then state and support your position fully in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the first body paragraph, where the ideas about cricket, practice, leagues and the Olympics are joined without clear links. Connectors such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” provide basic signposting, but some transitions are mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. The conclusion is also incomplete, which weakens the overall progression. Use clearer topic sentences, organise each paragraph around one main point, and link examples explicitly to that point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “qualification,” “placement,” “achieve their dream,” and “academic subject,” so the reader can generally identify the intended discussion. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “university scholar,” “more benifits,” “get chace,” and “participant in olympic.” Repetition of “student,” “sport,” and “focus” also limits precision. Aim to learn common academic collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions such as “pursue a degree,” “career prospects,” and “participate in the Olympics” would help communicate your ideas more clearly and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including examples introduced with “For example” and clauses beginning with “who.” However, control is weak: errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms occur frequently and sometimes obscure meaning. For instance, “Many university scholar interest” lacks correct plural and verb forms, while “A students who interest in sport” has problems with both the noun and clause structure. The final sentence, “In my opinion i agree with university provide extra subject,” is also grammatically incomplete. Build accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using correctly formed clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, plural nouns and complete sentence boundaries during revision.

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