Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In most of the universities the students want to get knoweldege about other subjects or other activities in addition to their main subjects most of the students want to read books in lab and some of the students want to take intrest in other activities.but when we look on the other hand side most students believe that it is more important to give all their time and attention to their own subject for a qualification.In my opinion i think that if any student have any quality and intrest then he should have to do these activities but if a student is weak and he will not able to manage these other activites then he should have to just focus on their own subjects

in my point of view it is the best opportunity for students to extra knoweldge in their universities if they study any other kind of subjects or books it will be best thing for them to increase theie knoweldge in future they will be able to any kind of work or job in future if a student have intrest in any other activities like singing or some thing else then they should have to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify both views: students may pursue other subjects or activities, while others prioritise their qualification, and you give a conditional opinion that depends on a student’s interests and ability to manage extra work. However, the discussion is only partial. The first view receives some explanation about gaining knowledge and future work, but the opposing view is mostly introduced rather than supported with reasons or an example. Your opinion also needs clearer development and a direct conclusion. The response contains 185 words, so it is 65 words below the required minimum; 12 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from that count. Develop each side with a specific reason and relevant example, then restate your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you introduce the two positions, state your opinion, and then begin explaining the benefits of studying additional subjects. Phrases such as “on the other hand” and “in my point of view” signal relationships between ideas. However, the response has no clear paragraphing, and the progression is difficult to follow because several points are joined in one long opening sentence. The final sentence stops at “they should have to,” leaving the idea unfinished. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, connect each reason to an example, and ensure every sentence is complete. This would make the organisation clearer and reduce reliance on a few repeated linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “qualification,” “subjects,” “activities,” and “knowledge,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, such as “knoweldge,” “intrest,” “activites,” and “theie.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “get knowledge” and “look on the other hand side.” Build a wider range of accurate academic phrases for discussing study choices, such as “broaden their knowledge,” “focus on their degree,” and “manage their workload.” Check spelling carefully and choose natural collocations; this will help express your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “if any student have any quality and intrest then he should have to do these activities.” This shows an effort to express conditions and explain a position. However, control is inconsistent: subject–verb agreement is faulty in “a student have,” and sentence boundaries are often unclear, particularly in the opening, where several ideas run together. The final clause is incomplete, ending with “they should have to.” Use a more controlled mix of short sentences and conditional structures, check agreement between subjects and verbs, and punctuate each complete idea. These changes would make your meaning easier to follow while preserving your attempts at more varied sentence forms.

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