Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Humans needs to work to fulfill their dreams , responsibilities , expenditure and manage their finances, People choose different ways to work as professional some one would like to work under some one's guidance and authority and someone would like to take risks and build there own business . Nowadays population are more fond of being self employed rather than to work for someone else . like a coins its also have two side positive and negative aspects . In further paragraph will discuss about both the scenerio.

To begin with nowadays generation do not like to work under oneThey are also ms authority , Some one ordering around them would be there least intrest . They are also more fond of taking risks , building there own business , exploring new ideas .Their most desirable forte is a freedom of work , letting them experiment new ideas . They feel working for someone or some company would let down their freedom of work . For example being owner of your own clothing brand , you can be as creative as you want .

Further , its also have negative effects such as failure in business leads to mental illness , a difficulty in fulfilling demands of days to day life ,a huge loss ,missing great opportunity at companys, lack of guidance . Running a business is not everyones cup of tea, they need to gain experiance first . failing in establishing what they want is the biggest factor of depression even suiside . In the rush of building their own business they loss many opportunities given by organisations . For example one person quit job at google to be influencer on social media .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: you explain the appeal of independence, risk-taking and creative freedom, then identify possible drawbacks such as financial loss, stress and missed employment opportunities. The clothing-brand example supports the freedom point, while the Google employee becoming an influencer illustrates the risk of leaving a secure job. However, several disadvantages are listed rather than explained, and the link between business failure and mental health is asserted without showing how or when this might occur. The response also needs a clearer, more direct position on why self-employment is attractive overall. Develop fewer points in greater depth, using specific reasoning or examples to show their consequences and make sure each example clearly supports the point it follows.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on reasons, and a paragraph on disadvantages. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with” and “Further” help signal the shift between these sections, and the examples are placed near relevant ideas. However, the introduction promises to discuss both sides, while the body’s progression is weakened by abrupt transitions and a long list of drawbacks. Some connections between ideas are unclear, particularly the move from business failure to depression and suicide, and then to missed opportunities. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each supporting detail explicitly to the main point. More precise referencing and less reliance on formulaic transitions would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to work and business, including “authority,” “taking risks,” “freedom of work,” “guidance,” and “opportunities.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and phrases such as “building their own business” show an effort to discuss the topic specifically. However, several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, including “least intrest,” “a huge loss,” “demands of days to day life,” and “biggest factor of depression.” Spelling errors such as “experiance” and “suiside” also reduce control. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe financial insecurity or business losses rather than relying on broad or awkward phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including explanations with “because”-type relationships and examples introduced by “For example.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in “Humans needs to work” and “population are more fond,” while “like a coins its also have two side” contains several problems with articles, number and verb form. Some sentences run together or lack clear punctuation, especially in the opening and the first body paragraph; “To begin with nowadays generation do not like to work under oneThey are also…” is difficult to parse. Use shorter, complete sentences while checking subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation, then build complexity gradually.

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