Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is no doubt large number of people wants to start their own business butt some think to do a job in a company or organisation.This is because in company they are bound in various types such as time and rules and individuals think about to do your own business.

One of the major reason that in many companies employes are are restricted to follow the rules and regulations.For instance if a employ is late due to some personal issue their company not allow he cut the salery of the emplopy.People who work in an organisation they get a fix amount which is insufficient for living.Workers are getting stuck in a heavy routine leads to destroy their mental as well as physical health. Hence, majority of the people prefer to be a self employed.

Another reason to be a self employed is now a days people are goin to remote work.They are free to work in a time limit and they can do remote work in every place from home even while traveling. Moreover, online work paid a handsome amount which is sufficient to survival.For example in covid a large number of people work online gain competitive edgein job market.Therefor self employment is more convenient than a job thats why majority are going to be self employed.

In conclusion,large amount of the people wants to be a businessman due to avoid the restrictions which is imposed by the organisation.To be a self employed they have freedom of work according to thier desires.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions by giving reasons for self-employment, including freedom from workplace rules and the flexibility of remote work. However, the task also asks for disadvantages, and this part is not answered: the response presents self-employment almost entirely positively and does not explain risks such as unstable income, lack of benefits, or responsibility for finding clients. Some reasons are also unclear or insufficiently supported. For example, the point about fixed salaries being insufficient is asserted rather than explained, and the COVID example does not clearly show why people chose self-employment. To improve, state a clear, balanced position and develop at least one relevant disadvantage with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs about reasons, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “For instance,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, the overall progression is limited because both body paragraphs focus on advantages, leaving the requested disadvantages absent. Some links are mechanical or unclear, and several ideas run together, particularly in the first body paragraph. The conclusion repeats the preference for self-employment rather than drawing together a balanced answer. Use each paragraph for a distinct task point, make the connection between examples and claims explicit, and use clear sentence boundaries so the reader can follow the argument more easily.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “rules and regulations,” “remote work,” “routine,” and “competitive edge.” These choices show an attempt to discuss employment and working conditions. However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations, and spellings are inaccurate or awkward, sometimes making meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “a fix amount” and “sufficient to survival” do not express the intended ideas naturally, while “employes,” “salery,” and “Therefor” contain spelling errors. Repeated use of “self employed” and “people” also limits variety. Build a bank of accurate employment-related phrases and check spelling and word forms; more precise vocabulary will make your reasons clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, using structures such as “For instance if…” and “Moreover…,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently and can make the reader pause. Examples include “large number of people wants,” “people are goin,” and “their company not allow he,” where the subject, verb, and pronoun forms do not fit together. Some sentences also lack clear punctuation or contain several ideas joined without a reliable structure. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and use shorter sentences when needed. Then add complex clauses gradually, checking each for agreement, articles, and punctuation before combining ideas.

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