Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In modernt times, self-employed word has become a complex issue in current times, while they do not work for any company or organisation and built by thereselves.

One of the main reasons for self-employed is that people are loosing their job without any reason. Because when a compay or organisation faced some problem in their income, then they leave employe without any warnings. Company are do not pay employes expected and other services like health insurance, home and transport bills. People do not maintain their family without less salary, for those they leave from their job and try to get some oppourtunity from business like agricultre, farming or grocery shop. People want to a bright future for their family to get a good salary.

There are several disadvantages of being sel-employed is that government face different types of problem. Because if people do not work on company or organisation, then company are getting close and it will be affected on economy. Private company pays a huge percentage in government tax and maintain the country economy.If any company affected by manpower then other country are do not invest their varities types of company. Another disadvantage are company are face various types of problem, when people do not work for their company and leave their company. Company are empty for their people power.

In conslusion, many people choose to be self-employed is contoversial issue with no easy solutions. If government or authorites do not take serious action in this section and provide good oppourtunity for people to work with company or organisation, it will be harmfull effects for their.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts both parts of the question: it suggests that job loss, low pay and a desire to support one’s family can lead people to start businesses, and it identifies possible economic effects as disadvantages. However, the discussion is only partial and the position is not consistently clear. The disadvantages focus mainly on companies and the national economy, rather than explaining the direct difficulties self-employed people may face, such as unstable income, lack of benefits or responsibility for business costs. The reasons are also asserted rather than illustrated or developed; for example, the list of “agriculture, farming or grocery shop” is not explained. Address both questions directly and support each main point with a clear explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response has an opening, separate paragraphs for reasons and disadvantages, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the broad stages of the answer. However, progression within paragraphs is weak, and several ideas are linked in ways that are difficult to follow. For instance, the disadvantages paragraph moves from government problems to company closures, investment and a shortage of workers without clearly showing how these points relate to the disadvantages of self-employment. Connectors such as “Because” and repeated uses of “then” are often mechanical, while “In conclusion” introduces a summary that does not clearly follow from the discussion. Use a clearer topic sentence for each paragraph and explain the relationship between each supporting point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a limited range of vocabulary to discuss employment and business, including “self-employed,” “company,” “organisation,” “salary” and “government tax.” Some topic-related terms help convey the general subject, but repetition of “company,” “people” and “problem” makes the writing imprecise. Frequent spelling and word-choice errors also make parts difficult to understand, such as “loosing their job,” “oppourtunity,” “varities types” and “manpower.” Some phrases are not natural in context, including “built by thereselves” and “bright future … to get a good salary.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for causes and drawbacks, and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe “unstable income” or “financial risk” rather than relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, but the range is limited and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout: “people are loosing,” “a compay … faced,” “Company are do not pay,” and “company are getting close.” Articles, plurals and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “one of the main reasons for self-employed” and “There are several disadvantages … is that.” These errors sometimes make the intended relationship between ideas unclear. There are also run-on or poorly punctuated sentences, particularly where a full stop is missing before “If any company.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete sentence patterns first, then use subordinate clauses only when you can control them.

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