Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, many people prefer to be self-employed rather working in an instituition copared to the past. However, in my opinion, the chice of working under an organization has not decreased much.

In recent times, people have developed new concept of become self-employed due to the introduction of new means of earning and the shortage of workplaces available. Many people want to do innovation, content creation or some work as influencer. Being entrepreneur is the most popular profession from my point of view. People simply do not want to work under the command of another people, they want to do their jobs indepently. The availability of technology as well as information has opened many doors of self-employement. Therefore, they enjoy doing their jobs freely and with their own ideas.

In addition, I do not think that the interest to work for a company has not reduced since it offers a stable job with a decent salary package, other facilities and a routined work schedule. Therefore, it remains at the top choice for most working people. Morever, in today's world, getting a job is a bit difficult compared to the past, but the interest is not diminshed.

in conclusion, it can be said that there is competition in finding a job in a company, but the interest remains the same whereas many people want to become self-employed due to their preferences, difficulties in finding job and due to the available opportunities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant reasons for self-employment, including new earning opportunities, limited workplace availability, technology, and a desire for independence. However, the task asks about disadvantages, and this part is not addressed: the paragraph about company work instead argues that salaried employment remains attractive. Your opening also questions whether employment in organisations has declined, which shifts attention from the two questions rather than establishing a direct response. The conclusion repeats reasons but does not add the missing disadvantages. The response is also 11 words below the required minimum. To improve, explain specific drawbacks—such as irregular income, lack of employee benefits, or responsibility for finding clients—and support them with an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the first body paragraph groups several reasons for self-employment. Basic linking expressions such as “In addition,” “Therefore,” and “in conclusion” help signal relationships. However, progression is weakened because the second body paragraph discusses the continued appeal of company jobs rather than developing the requested disadvantages of self-employment. Some links are also repetitive, particularly repeated uses of “Therefore,” and the conclusion largely restates earlier points. Organise the body around the two task questions, using one paragraph for reasons and another for disadvantages, and make each paragraph’s main point explicit before adding explanation or an example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “self-employed,” “content creation,” “stable job,” “salary package,” and “work schedule.” These terms make the general subject clear, and phrases such as “availability of technology” show an attempt to express ideas beyond basic vocabulary. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “instituition,” “copared,” “chice,” “indepently,” and “self-employement.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “new concept of become self-employed” and “Being entrepreneur.” Proofread spelling and learn common collocations as complete phrases. More precise vocabulary for the missing disadvantages, such as “income instability” and “limited employee benefits,” would also help address the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including the clause “due to the introduction of new means of earning and the shortage of workplaces available” and the sentence beginning “In addition.” Most ideas remain understandable, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms occur throughout. For example, “prefer to be self-employed rather working” is missing “than,” while “new concept of become self-employed” uses an incorrect verb form. “People simply do not want to work under the command of another people” also has an agreement problem, and the opening contains an awkward comparison with “compared to the past.” Practise accurate comparative structures, verb patterns after nouns and prepositions, and singular/plural agreement. Then check each sentence for a complete, natural grammatical structure.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.