Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Due to the influence of self-employed person who get sucess, people nowaday also choose to be self-employed, rather then work under any organization.

There are many reasons that why people want to be self-employed or make their own business, first reason is motivation, which is given by some social media influencer. Morover, many time person overthink that they get rich if they choose this path. In addition, many people do not want to do work under any other person which is the big reason for the self-employnment. Also many time people want do do something big in their life and everybudy should noticed this think so for this reason many want to be a businessman.

However, there are many disadvantages of this path, like many time due to unsufficient knowledge people came under debt of other person or a bank. It may also harm the social life of person who is under the debt. Many time person face some health problem due to overnight working.

We saw that many time person don't able to pay debt on time, maybe they leave the country overnight like Nijay Malia or Virav modi who is also a big businessman in their time, but time to time, amount of debt are increased on their sholder and at the end they don't able to pay dept and then they have to leave the country.

So in conclusion, Self-employment is a one way to get sucess but it is not only one way to get sucessfull, if person havr sufficient knowledge and risk taking ability, for those, this is a best way either we also get succes wir beaing an Employer.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that social-media success stories, hopes of becoming rich, dislike of working for others, and ambition can motivate self-employment, then identify debt and health problems as disadvantages. These points are relevant, but several remain general or unclear. For example, the claim that people want “everybody” to notice them is not explained, and the discussion of debt focuses on people fleeing the country rather than clearly showing how this risk affects self-employed workers more broadly. The examples of named businesspeople are also asserted rather than connected to a developed explanation. Make your position and reasons more precise, and extend each main point with a clear cause-and-effect explanation or a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on reasons, a paragraph on disadvantages, a further debt example, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the two sides of the task. However, progression is uneven: the separate paragraph about businesspeople owing money repeats the debt point from the previous paragraph instead of adding a distinct disadvantage. Linking phrases such as “In addition,” “Also,” and “However” are used, but the reasons paragraph reads like a list, and some connections between ideas are unclear. For instance, the move from wanting recognition to becoming a businessman needs explanation. Group related points, use topic sentences, and make each paragraph develop one main idea rather than relying mainly on additive transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “self-employed,” “motivation,” “debt,” “social life,” and “risk taking ability,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning harder to follow: “influence of self-employed person who get sucess,” “under debt of other person,” and “amount of debt are increased on their sholder.” Spelling errors such as “sucess,” “Morover,” “employnment,” and “sholder” are also noticeable. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “financial liabilities” or “work independently” would help you express your ideas clearly without repeating “many time” and “person.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a relative clause in “motivation, which is given by some social media influencer” and a conditional structure in the conclusion. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and articles frequently make reading difficult. Examples include “many people do not want to do work under any other person,” “people came under debt,” and “if person havr sufficient knowledge.” The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical relationship between its ideas. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and conditionals. Check singular and plural forms, verb tense, and articles, and use punctuation to separate long or joined ideas.

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