Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Thesedays, individuals choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. i also agreed with the view becuase i also choose to be selp-employed. i have created accounts on upworks, fiver and linkdin. i usually get consumers for there.

Although, nowadays many people start self employment just because it is convient to make money. Money is only thing that everyone want. Furthermore people like to be owner of their self. many business owners or CEOs treat badly to their workers. this is the also a reason to people to choose self employment. self employment have alot of disadvantages along with advantages. firstly, its cost very high. To start a self build up, we need to compete against material and requirment. for example if we start architecture profession, we need one big room, good computer systems, big tables, printers and ploter for large sheets work. its cost very high to person.

In contrast, Self work have benefits due to this everyone creat one to two jobs. like in my feild, my two friends are working with me as a Draftsman. i create a design and take help from them while drafting. i also paid to my officeboy. moreover, Its helps to feel happy.

To sum with, everything have their own advantages and disadvantages. self employment is good too but working with company and organisation boast our experience. it gives a time to work with experience people in a group form. we are able to learn more there as compared to self empleyment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you suggest that people seek convenient income and independence, and you describe costs and the possibility of employing others. Your personal example about working with two draftsmen makes the discussion relevant. However, the reasons are only briefly explained, and the response shifts to benefits—such as creating jobs and feeling happy—without clearly developing the disadvantages requested. The conclusion also introduces the benefits of company work rather than firmly summarising your answer. The response is 242 words, so it is 8 words below the 250-word minimum; the 14 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each main point with a clear explanation or example, especially the disadvantages, and meet the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation: the response moves from reasons for self-employment to costs, then to personal benefits and a conclusion. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these sections, and examples such as the equipment needed for architectural work support the discussion. However, the overall progression is not always clear because the paragraph beginning “In contrast” moves from disadvantages to benefits, and the conclusion adds a new comparison with company work. Linking expressions such as “Although,” “Furthermore,” and “To sum with” are sometimes inaccurate or mechanical, while references such as “this” in “Its helps to feel happy” are unclear. Use topic sentences that match each paragraph’s purpose and connect ideas with more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “self-employed,” “consumers,” “CEOs,” “disadvantages,” and “Draftsman,” and the examples show an attempt to discuss a specific profession. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning less clear, such as “compete against material,” “self build up,” and “owner of their self.” Spelling errors—including “convient,” “requ irment” (written as “requirment”), and “empleyment”—are noticeable, as are inconsistent forms such as “self employment” and “self-employed.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for costs, independence, and employment, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, for example the sentence beginning “Although, nowadays many people…” and the example about starting an architecture profession. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms. Examples include “Money is only thing that everyone want,” “self employment have alot of disadvantages,” and “i also paid to my officeboy.” Some sentences are difficult to follow because clauses are joined or punctuated inaccurately, as in “Although, nowadays…” and “To sum with, everything have their own advantages and disadvantages.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete sentence patterns, then proofread punctuation and capitalisation.

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