Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In contemporary time people select to be their own business because own business helps them to success in their life . And some people think that work to a company and organisation is better than.
When people work in a company or organisation they go to their on time and their salary is also fixed, if company get a loss then salary is arrive to them ,but there are some negative effect. Such as they have a burden of work and under the pressure of. They work for many hours but they got insufficient money . When ever they take leave some money is dected from their salary but waste thing is that they should not get loss .
On other hand people choose to be self employed because they dont word in under the pressure , their own business increase their self confidence and develop thir practical skiils . People have enough money so they establish their own business . There are many business which are beneficial for them such as shop , their own hospital but they know techniques or knowledge about how they get profit in business .for example there was a company of bsnl but now it got loss and it was not anymore .
I recommend that those people who have sufficient money or have a brilliant knowledge about business they should choose their own business but those people who have not knowledge about business they should choose their company or organisation . Both have own their benefit and both are important .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: why people choose self-employment and the potential disadvantages. However, the development of these ideas is limited. The reasons provided for self-employment, such as 'increase self-confidence' and 'develop practical skills,' are somewhat superficial. The discussion regarding the disadvantages of traditional employment is also slightly unclear, particularly the phrasing 'waste thing is that they should not get loss.' The argument lacks depth and specific, well-explained examples. While the response is on-topic, the ideas are not fully extended, and the conclusion is a bit repetitive. To improve, you should focus on providing more detailed explanations and concrete examples for each point raised.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On other hand' is used to start a paragraph, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. There are issues with referencing; for instance, the transition between discussing company employment and self-employment is abrupt. The logical progression of ideas is sometimes difficult to follow due to awkward phrasing and a lack of sophisticated linking words. Improving the variety and accuracy of transition signals will significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'business,' 'company,' and 'money.' There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'select to be their own business' instead of 'choose to be self-employed' and 'salary is arrive to them.' Some phrases are unclear, such as 'waste thing is that they should not get loss.' To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations related to the topic of employment and business management.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('people select,' 'salary is arrive'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as 'And some people think that work to a company and organisation is better than.' The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some errors in complex constructions. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions.
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