Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Work in the organization is only engage with this only limited conditions and work on limited areas but other self employed is all day 24 hours engage with the business .
some people think work for a company is a slave life that's why some people choose to quit company job and then he choose to build his business . In which his mindset is set to grow his business and in the basis it choose self employed but he is not understand a business man is not a self employed that's why the self employed is not a good choice compare with the company job .
this mindset is loose the human empower when the people choose the self employed it works more harder not smarter but in the other end company job is also requires more harder work but it stuck in the timing like 9:00 am to 5:00 pm which is much easy .
Disadvantages:
1.disadvantages of being self-employed it works more and more and every burden in to his mind which cause a medical effect.
2. other disadvantages of being self-employed is when the loss in the work its own financial loss instead of any other else .
Example :
i personally know 1 person who quit his work job in the organization for to start his own work and he starts the business and make a self-employed .
His routine is according to the job worker like 9 to 5 it implement same in his business and for use this routine his business is in too loss within months.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for self-employment and listing disadvantages. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. The argument regarding the difference between a 'businessman' and 'self-employed' is confusing and lacks logical depth. The example provided is relevant but poorly integrated, making it difficult to follow the writer's intended point. The response lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, and the overall position is not well-articulated, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks a clear structure. The use of bullet points for disadvantages is inappropriate for an IELTS essay, which requires formal paragraphing. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'that's why' and 'in the other end'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the lack of clear transitions between sentences makes the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate the different parts of the task, which significantly impacts the logical flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. Phrases like 'medical effect' and 'slave life' are used in ways that do not fit the formal context of an academic essay. There is significant repetition of words such as 'work', 'business', and 'self-employed'. The student struggles with word choice and collocation, such as 'loose the human empower' and 'works more harder', which indicates a limited range of vocabulary and difficulty in expressing complex ideas precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure meaning. Sentence structures are mostly simple or fragmented, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage (e.g., 'he is not understand'), and word order are pervasive. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters and incorrect usage of commas. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammatical structures.
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