Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the present period many people select to be own business, rather than to work for a agency or job.
In the evident, nowadays people want to make own business for their goods, future needs and more. Most of the people are suffering from their least education so they are getting failed or reject in the interview for any job and many people are very educated and very well known about business related data or information by this, they are likely to make own business for more profits so easily they can live their life. This might be the case.
Creating a own business is good however, it could be the disadvantage of being self-employed. Being self-employed is not easy, at starting it was hard to handle, firstly location takes time for clients knowing, business will work or not, getting loss in money, no management, takes long period of time for building.
This all are the disadvantages of being self-employed. If giving example so, it would be that any business takes time to make progress and it will work or not it depends upon people that they will likes or not means if some one is opening a cafe so, it need good management , delicious food, professional staff, from that people are not getting good taste or not feeling good it may be loss for the cafe, second not getting better service from waiter it also be a loss for cafe owner for profit.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, but the development is limited and the ideas are under-developed. The explanation for why people choose self-employment is somewhat disjointed, focusing on a mix of lack of education and business knowledge. The disadvantages are listed rather than explained in depth. Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which negatively impacts the overall task achievement score. To improve, you should provide more detailed examples and ensure your arguments are fully expanded to meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'This all are', 'If giving example so'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of arguments. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'select to be own business' instead of 'choose to be self-employed' and 'agency or job' instead of 'company or organization'. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. You should focus on learning common collocations related to business and employment to improve your lexical range and accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it need good management'), article usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'In the evident, nowadays people want...'). The range of sentence structures is limited, relying mostly on simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. To reach a higher band, you need to work on basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and ensuring that your grammar is consistent throughout the essay.
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