Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In recent years,mostly people do not wants to work under any company or organisation.I shed some light on given statement and find some numreous point. I will discuss my point of view in upcoming paragraph with logical conclusion.
To start with,there are many reason associated with it,the first and for most point is stress.To explain this, when a person choose self-employed reather then work under a company. So,they have need to struggle more with their work. Addiontally, the stress about the incline and decline in their work how its work good not for their career but, when they work under in company so that strees of work may be low. Moreover,impact on income.To justify this, when people wants to do their own buisness so, their income depends upon the growth of that while, in campanises it almost opposite.
Moving toward further details, the next point is, risk. To elobrate this , in todays the rate of risk for self emloyed person is very high because almost every person wants to start there own buisness also wants to grow it . So, they have risk about it will sucess or not in the way they want. Therefore, the competition is also incresed in market .All the peole wants to become sucessful and famous.
To conclude, although the numerous point is about the risk ,struggle and strees in te life of self employed person in comparision of that who work under in any company or organisatin.Therefore, to start own work it is important to have proper knowlegde about to grow it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons for choosing self-employment (such as avoiding company stress and managing income) and disadvantages (such as high risk and intense market competition). However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, relying on generalizations rather than deep elaboration or specific examples. For instance, the discussion on stress and risk touches upon relevant points, but the explanations are brief and lack clear supporting evidence from real-world contexts. While the position is discernible throughout the essay, the arguments remain underdeveloped, placing this performance in the Band 5 category according to the official descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates some organizational structure, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding remark, although the transitions between ideas can feel mechanical and repetitive (using phrases like 'To start with', 'To explain this', and 'To elobrate this'). Paragraphing is attempted, but sentence boundaries are frequently blurred due to punctuation errors and missing spaces after commas, which disrupts the logical flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and although cohesive devices are present, they are often used inaccurately or repetitively, resulting in an overall lack of smooth progression. This aligns closely with Band 5 descriptors for cohesion and logical sequencing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'self-employed', 'competition', and 'organisation', but struggles with word choice, word formation, and spelling errors (e.g., 'reather', 'Addiontally', 'incline', 'buisness', 'elobrate', 'emloyed', 'sucess', 'knowlegde'). These lexical errors and awkward collocations (such as 'the stress about the incline and decline in their work how its work good') are noticeable and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader in grasping the precise meaning, reflecting the characteristics of Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, and clause structures (e.g., 'people do not wants', 'when a person choose self-employed reather then work under a company. So,they have need to struggle', 'how its work good not for their career'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and run-on sentences. While the meaning can generally be deciphered, the frequency of grammatical errors and faulty complex structures places this response firmly at Band 5.
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