Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Employement is very essential for personal growming as well as for living a well established life.Now a day people are liking there own business rather than working under any company or organization. They prefer this because they donot have to followed their rules. They work on their own pace they are not bound to any timings like 9-5 which they have to follow in the office.
People are liking their own business beacuse they unable to get a desirable jobs or they have to run their own family business or they want to announce some career opportunity for other as well. But the fact is that they prefer self employed beacuse they have not to answer about there work to someone else like we can see that thing if we are working under any company. or organization . Along with that donot have to work under pressure they knew they donot have to get fired whatever the new innovative idea they want to work on it they can do it without any fear.
In contrast there are some disadvantages of self employed are there like the people who are self employed they cannot develop a punctuality in them.Along with that they would not develop a skill which we can see as teamworker if we working under some organization we develop how to work in a group and how to listen to boss instructions.They follow their own rules which would not allow them to develop how to listen some other people opinion or views.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing the reasons why people choose self-employment, such as avoiding strict company rules, working at one's own pace, and escaping office pressure. It also covers the disadvantages, including a lack of punctuality and missing out on teamwork skills. However, the ideas are quite limited and under-developed, relying on repetitive points rather than deep extension with relevant examples. For instance, the mention of family businesses and creating career opportunities is introduced briefly without further elaboration. Because the prompt asks for reasons and disadvantages with relevant examples, the brief and generalized nature of the explanation places this response firmly at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays some overall organization with a clear division into introductory, body, and concluding paragraphs. However, there is a noticeable lack of clear progression and logical flow between ideas. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the frequent reliance on 'along with that' and 'because'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is somewhat disjointed; for example, the second paragraph abruptly shifts between multiple unrelated reasons for self-employment without smooth transitional links. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as 'we can see that thing'. These issues reflect the characteristics of Band 5, where cohesion is often inaccurate or inadequate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and basic, with noticeable errors that occasionally impede understanding and cause difficulty for the reader. The writer uses simple vocabulary and encounters frequent issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'employement', 'growming', 'liking' instead of 'liking to start', and 'self employed' used inconsistently. Attempts at less common vocabulary or phrases, such as 'innovative idea', are undermined by inaccurate collocations like 'they have not to answer' and 'they unable to get a desirable jobs'. Due to the restricted range and frequent errors in word formation and phrasing, this performance aligns with Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by basic conjunctions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, marred by missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb forms, and punctuation errors. Examples include 'they donot have to followed their rules', 'they work on their own pace', and 'the people who are self employed they cannot develop a punctuality'. Furthermore, run-on sentences and missing capitalization or articles are widespread throughout the text, creating frequent errors that hinder readability. Consequently, the grammar corresponds to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the presence of some basic communicative sentence forms.
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