Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today world a lot of people are willing to be self-employed instead of working for someone else company or organisation it might be due to the insane rise in the technology and the craze of Artificial Intellegence people are asking AI bots for the ideas and entrepreneurship.
We are living in the era of AI and everyone have access to the AI chatbots
they are sharing their crazy business ideas with the AI and the llm which stands for large language models agree with their ideas without any sort of arguments with them which makes them think that they can really achieve their delusional goals or business they are runnig after and a lot of people get their goals as well but majority of the people fails.
We also have a lot of disadvantages of begin self-employed in which on some we will talk the first and the major one is that you will be working day and night without any proper physical or mental rest which will have a huge impact on your health and family relations if you want to be self-employed you must need complete support from your family or your partner and that because in the start of begin self-employed you will face alot of issues it may be financial or some sort of other like health or may be mental moving forward to the second biggest disadvantage of self-employed is if you can not face much difficulities or big loses so begin self-employed will be the worst option you pick and that because if you fail in that you will never be recover from that loss or trauma.
Like i will mentioned one of my father's friend Abdul Hakim he is not a big risk taker but still he choose to be self-employed and he start chicks farming without any good experience in that field in the end he face a big loss in the farming in the form of chickens dying from the cold temputure in the farms and still he is not recover from that loss he and his whole family suffer alot due to that one wrong decision to be self-employed and that's all about the cases, disadvantage and the actucal reason of begin self-employed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both the reasons why people choose self-employment (such as technology and AI chatbots) and the disadvantages (such as exhaustion, financial risk, and lack of resilience). However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and heavily reliant on a single personal anecdote about the writer's father's friend. The focus on AI as the primary driver for self-employment is a narrow interpretation, but it remains a relevant idea. The position is clear throughout, yet the overall depth of argumentation aligns best with Band 5.5 to 6.0 descriptors because some points are under-developed and lack broader socio-economic context.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text suffers significantly from a lack of proper punctuation and paragraphing. The entire response is essentially broken into only four extremely long run-on sentences or paragraphs with minimal use of full stops or commas. For instance, the second paragraph and the third paragraph run continuously without adequate boundary markers. While basic cohesive devices such as 'moving forward to' and 'in the end' are attempted, the overall organizational structure is faulty due to the complete absence of proper punctuation, which makes progression hard to follow. This performance corresponds to Band 4.5 or 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'entrepreneurship', 'delusional', and 'trauma'. However, there are numerous word-choice and spelling inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'Intellegence' instead of intelligence, 'begin' instead of being, 'temputure' instead of temperature, and 'actucal' instead of actual. These lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'chicks farming' instead of chicken farming, occasionally strain the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Grammatical control is a major weak point in this response. The text is characterized by massive run-on sentences joined by commas or lacking punctuation entirely, such as 'We also have a lot of disadvantages of begin self-employed in which on some we will talk...'. There is a very limited range of accurate complex structures, and frequent errors in basic sentence construction, verb forms ('majority of the people fails', 'is if you can not face'), and preposition usage. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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