Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Today countless the individual choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a bussiness or organisation. In the world, many people are sucessful for working in job as a employes but boss have friendly for employes.so, I think employes have very good or seriously working in office and friendly for a related employes and the combine the working for office. but employes is strict working in office. I strongly disadvantages with this viewpoints and in this essay , I will provide reasons or example to support my perspcetive.
On the other hand, Mnay employes are very strict working but many company or organisation are very differnt interview or cv is very strict for office and suitable for company but emoployes work in office. so , many company have self employes for working in company but they have very old employes join the company . so, I think many company have accept the job for every employes but poor employes have gain the for home situation is handle. For inatance, many people have going the interview but they have any 2 employes have poor and other are rich people . but company boss is choose the employes for 2 rich peoole not a poor people . they have disadvantage but many people as a same foe boss employes.
On the other hand, Many people have very strict situation for gain the job in any company. so, i thinkl may have not different for rich or poor but they have as a same . And the poor people are very accept for job in company and they have very hard working in company but they have very bad working situation has easliy handle . Although the people have very friendly for company boss and combine the working in office. and ther other organisation people working in but they have not a comfortable for working the organuisation .
In the conclusions, Although many people are sucess ful for working job as a employes but they have have hardworking in company. So, I think many employes have very friendly working for boss as a time . so, poor people is very hard working in company and poor employes is honest person.Therefore with proper planning and effective measures, this situation can have a positive impact on individuals ans society.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding self-employment, but the arguments are extremely confused, frequently switching focus between employment and self-employment. The prompt asks for reasons why people choose self-employment and the disadvantages of it, but the student spends the majority of the essay discussing rich versus poor employees, job interviews, and office bosses. The position is unclear throughout, and the ideas are undeveloped and largely irrelevant to the core task. This corresponds to Band 4, as the response touches on aspects of employment and independence tangentially but fails to properly address the specific requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical organisation and progression are severely lacking. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as repetitive and contradictory transitions like 'On the other hand' used repeatedly to introduce unrelated points. Referencing is frequently unclear, and pronouns often lack a clear antecedent, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion fails because sentences do not logically flow from one to the next. Overall, the arrangement is incoherent.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student frequently misuses words or uses non-standard terms, such as 'bussiness', 'employes', 'perspcetive', and 'inatance'. There are numerous spelling errors and incorrect word choices throughout the text, which often strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning. The range of vocabulary is inadequate for a higher band, as advanced or less common lexical items are missing, and even basic terms are misspelled repeatedly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The student relies on basic sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences result in severe structural breakdowns and nonsensical clauses. There are pervasive errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('countless the individual choose'), tense consistency, and prepositions. Punctuation is also misused, with frequent run-on sentences and erratic capitalization. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort the meaning of the writing.
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