Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Today, some people select to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or any organization.

Firstly, it is observed that many young adults face difficulties in search for a job. Sometime they got a job but the authorities paid very low salaies to the employees but almost 70% of individuals did not found any job oppurtunity. In this way they choose self-employed rather than doing a job. Moreover, some individuals was treated very badly in the office by the other employees or by a manager. Thats why they choose self-employed. Their parents paid too much fee on their children but if they did not find any job their parents promote them to be self-employed for better future of their generation. You can also earn too much money from self-employed instead of doing a job on low salarey.

Secondly, if young adult open their own organiztion or company they face to many difficulties. The main reason is that they are lack of knowledge if they will faced a serious problem in the future thei dream to become a self-emplyed will be ruined. Additionally, they also too many difiiculty on hiring an employees because at the first they can not pay too much salaries so why people came to them for a job rather than working in a high leel company. thay can also face financial issues and also how to promote their company to the individauls it required a lot of money. There are several that that they might be faced in the future.

In conclusion, I believe that i you have experience then you should self-employed otherwise you face too much problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, exploring the reasons why people choose self-employment and the potential disadvantages they might face. The introduction notes the trend towards self-employment, and the body paragraphs touch on key points such as job scarcity, low salaries, workplace dissatisfaction, financial risks, and hiring difficulties. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on why people choose self-employment jumps between job scarcity and bad experiences with managers without deep elaboration. Furthermore, the argument occasionally relies on sweeping generalizations, such as claiming that 'almost 70% of individuals did not found any job opportunity.' While a clear position is maintained throughout the essay, the supporting examples tend to be anecdotal rather than thoroughly extended, placing the response firmly within Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay demonstrates some basic organizational structure, making use of transition markers like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'In conclusion' to signal the progression of ideas. However, paragraphing is problematic; the second body paragraph attempts to cover multiple complex disadvantages—financial issues, hiring difficulties, and lack of knowledge—without clear internal organization or logical transitions between these sub-points. Additionally, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, as seen in phrases like 'Thats why they choose self-employed.' Referencing can also be unclear, which disrupts the smooth flow of information. While the overall arrangement is somewhat coherent, the lack of sophisticated cohesive management and poor paragraph cohesion restrict the score to a Band 5.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on high-frequency words and phrases such as 'job,' 'company,' 'money,' and 'difficulties.' There are also noticeable word choice and collocation errors throughout the text, including phrases like 'in search for a job,' 'paid very low salaies,' 'did not found,' and 'high leel company.' Furthermore, spelling inaccuracies are present, such as 'salaies,' 'oppurtunity,' 'difiiculty,' and 'individauls.' While the lexical range is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, the frequent errors and lack of less common lexical items prevent the response from achieving a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including tense inconsistencies ('some individuals was treated'), subject-verb agreement issues ('young adult open'), and structural flaws ('if you have experience then you should self-employed'). Punctuation is also neglected in places, notably with missing apostrophes ('Thats why') and incomplete sentence boundaries. Because errors occur frequently and occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader in untangling the intended meaning, the performance aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5 based on the descriptor fit for frequent errors.

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