Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

majurity of the people choose to self employed because they are beneficial rather then to work for any organization.

on the first hand ,self employed is most important because they have make to the person very responsible and puntuate .people work hard and regularly for our purposes.basically self employed are make to the person financially stable and grow in the world.mainly if you are self employed you can face and solve every dificult situation in our life.

on the second hand ,sometimes self employed are risky for us because many people had no any experience to work individually .so some people had face to lose in your business .if we are work in any organization there are many people working together in same place and less chance to face any dificulty because each employe help to each other and every person give your own opinion and work for better advantages.

I strongly agree and support that the self employed are much better better than to work for any company.in my experience most of my friends work on a websites indivually and have earn a worthy amount.one of my close friend that work on freelancing platform alone.They cannot work with any company because he earn better then the organization salery.

Conclusion,so i prefer the self employed because they are beneficial for us and help to make financially strong then other people.self employed make a peson hard working and regular.there are many other benefits of self employed like people not bound for any company. So many people choose self-employed rather then work for any organization.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing reasons for choosing self-employment (such as financial stability, flexibility, and personal responsibility) as well as disadvantages (such as risk and lack of experience). However, the development of these ideas is limited and sometimes repetitive. For instance, the discussion on advantages largely circles back to financial benefits and responsibility without deeper exploration or concrete real-world examples beyond a vague mention of friends freelancing. Furthermore, the position is somewhat simplistic, and the conclusion merely restates points rather than synthesizing them. It meets the requirements for Band 5 by addressing the parts of the task, though the ideas remain underdeveloped and rely on sweeping generalizations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text attempts to organize ideas using paragraph breaks and basic cohesive markers like 'on the first hand', 'on the second hand', and 'Conclusion,so'. However, the progression is frequently disjointed due to poor mechanical linking and a lack of smooth transitions between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of paragraphs lacks logical flow, with abrupt shifts in ideas. Referencing is often confusing, as seen with pronoun shifts (e.g., switching between 'they', 'we', and 'he' when referring generally to self-employed individuals). While there is an overall attempt to structure an essay, the frequent flaws in cohesion place this firmly in the Band 5 category.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, utilizing simple terms such as 'beneficial', 'good', 'work', and 'money'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices throughout, such as 'majurity' instead of majority, 'to self employed' instead of to be self-employed, 'puntuate' instead of punctual, and 'salery' instead of salary. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or poorly collated. While the meaning is generally decipherable despite the errors, the vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, reflecting a Band 5 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. Complex sentences are attempted (e.g., 'if you are self employed you can face and solve every dificult situation'), but they are often marred by faulty syntax, incorrect verb forms, and missing articles. Frequent punctuation errors and run-on phrasing, such as 'Conclusion,so i prefer', are present throughout. Grammatical errors are dense and frequently strain the reader, aligning closely with the descriptors for Band 4, though the consistent attempt at basic subject-verb patterns lifts it to a weak 5.0.

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