Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this modern era, people are certainly aware with the significance of self-employment, they are more likely want to be self-employed: rather than to do job under the perssure of bosses and managers. People are keen to manufacture their own products and to earn profit. Running a corporation more beneficial than to do 9 to 5 job and take salary according to will of directors.

Although some people are in favour of doing work with an organization, to run a business is more beneficial in trems of earning and stability of mental health. For instance, A person who is running his own business even it is on small scale or SME, he will be mentally stong and earning more money.

However, people choose to work by themslve, thefore, they can be their own bosses. They want to make thier own policies and strategies to run a successfull business. Whereas, work for an organization can be more hectic than running a business.

Moreover, people preffer to run an organisation due to several reasons, they want to work with freedom, likwise they dream big, they dream to conqure the business world. They want to build their own empire of business to compete the challanges and hardships of life.

Additionally, People who want to run thier own business, are not suposed to live a life of a prison. They feel, doing job under the supervision of managers with low wages and salaries is a cruel act and an injustice with their intellegence. As a result, they start thier on setup of small and medium enterprises (SME).

However, possible disadvantages can be that the investments are at stake, if there is any mistake happen, business can be dorwned and destroyed. Moreover, self-employed person cannot pay attention to thier relationships and family, they have to be fully attentive for thier business. Consequently, they have to bear the loss of relationships.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses both questions: it gives reasons such as wanting to be one’s own boss, having freedom to set policies, and seeking higher earnings, then identifies financial risk and harm to family relationships as disadvantages. These points are relevant, but several are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that self-employment improves “stability of mental health” is not supported, and the example of a small business owner does not show how or why earnings would be higher. The disadvantages are also brief compared with the reasons. A clearer, consistent position and more specific explanation or examples for each main point would make the response more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has paragraphs and a broadly recognisable movement from reasons to disadvantages, so the reader can identify its main sections. However, progression within the reasons is weak: several paragraphs repeat the ideas of freedom, being one’s own boss, and building a business without clearly adding a new stage to the argument. Linking words such as “Moreover,” “Additionally,” and “However” are frequent, but sometimes do not express the relationship between ideas accurately; “However” introduces another reason in one paragraph. References such as “they” and “their” can also be unclear. Organise the reasons into fewer, distinct points, use topic sentences, and connect each explanation directly to its claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The writer attempts vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “self-employment,” “investments,” “supervision,” and “small and medium enterprises.” There is also some effort to use more expressive language, such as “build their own empire.” However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “business,” “work,” and “people,” while several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning less natural: “aware with the significance,” “business can be drowned,” and “loss of relationships.” Spelling errors are noticeable, including “perssure,” “trems,” and “succesfull.” Use more precise business vocabulary and check spelling and common word partnerships to make the ideas easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “Although,” “Whereas,” and “if.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to read. For example, “people are certainly aware with the significance …, they are more likely want” joins clauses incorrectly and has an incomplete verb pattern. Other examples include “A person … even it is on small scale … he will” and “if there is any mistake happen,” where clause structure and verb forms are not controlled. Articles, agreement, and punctuation also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a correctly formed subordinate clause before adding further complexity.

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