Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Well, there are many crowed who starting there own work instead of employment in any company or organisation. There are many reason due to which people are changing their thoughts to run their own bussiness and trade openly in market. Jobs and workforce do not availible in this country, if there is any remote jobs or physical work their payout is minor.

However, runinng a bussiness by yourself can fit some major issues such that the individual will not be much familiar to begining and handling a system. They dont know how a businessman will thoughts, works, build their reinforce and schedule for meetings. They loss their everythings to start their own work unless their infrastucture fails, they become begger losing their everythings.

Moreover, there are few advantages which give confidience and bring there company reach at new heights. I argued with a life example, my friend initiate their company of tissue paper with a cheap rate in market. He works so hard and their performance and working rises and now he is dealing with high quality products.

Some pros are goverment and people not give a good package of income to establish their indeeds and requirements, they assure their self with a risk and build a compant which gives him self independence, high values, good retureback and freedom from stress of financial statues.

As a result, organisation did not giving their rights and minor salary package disturbs their minds and think abount their own work. Some become rich in one night and some of them lose their everythink in starting their bussiness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: low or unavailable wages and limited job opportunities are offered as reasons for self-employment, while lack of business experience and the risk of losing money are identified as disadvantages. The tissue-paper business example also gives some relevant support. However, the response only partially develops these points. The explanation of why people choose self-employment is brief, and the later paragraph about advantages and financial independence does not clearly distinguish the causes from the disadvantages asked about. The conclusion repeats the general idea but does not clarify your overall explanation. Develop each answer with a clear reason and a specific explanation or example, and keep the discussion focused on the two questions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some paragraphing, and words such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “As a result” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow: the response moves from reasons, to disadvantages, to an example of success, then back to advantages and reasons. The relationship between some sentences is unclear, particularly “Moreover, there are few advantages” after a paragraph about risks. References such as “they” and “their” also make it hard to tell whether you mean an individual, a friend, or business owners generally. Organise the essay into a clear introduction, one paragraph on reasons, one on disadvantages, and a conclusion; use linking phrases only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary related to employment and business, including “self independence,” “financial,” “infrastructure,” and “high quality products.” However, the range is limited and many word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “crowed,” “payout is minor,” “build their reinforce,” and “good retureback”; these do not express the intended ideas clearly or naturally. Repetition of “their everythings” also limits precision. Build a reliable set of business and employment expressions, check spelling, and choose words that fit their context—for example, describe low pay as “low wages” and business failure as “financial losses.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “if there is any remote jobs or physical work their payout is minor.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “people who starting,” “Jobs and workforce do not availible,” “They loss,” and “organisation did not giving.” Some sentences also combine several ideas without clear grammatical links, as in the sentence beginning “Some pros are goverment and people not give.” Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with controlled clauses; check subject–verb agreement and consistent verb forms when editing.

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