Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemporary society, People choose not to work for any company but work as a self-employed to earn money. As far as I am concerned , I think that there are more dvantages of being self employee instead of working for anu organisation.

Firstly, nowadays mostly companies used to give a very low rate of income to their employers. This is the reason that turn the individual mind to work without any institute. Moreover, in this modern era, Artificial Intelligance takes control over everything and did the work in behalf of people. For example, Millionairs make their own brands and work independently earning a lot of profit. As a result, others also think of quitting the jobs and start their own organistaion.

Secondly, in our teaching institutions many students start their buisness in very young age instead of those who work for a company and earn a low amount of money.However, some ceo of organisations are treating their workers badly and do not provide them facilities such as provide health insurance or others. For instance, instruction organisations earn a lot of profit from their deals but not providing any health service to the labours got injured due to work. Hence, people quit such a jobs and find their own ways.

In contrast , being self earned is no less than a stress machine,because, the individuals always think about new ideas for erning and not take proper rest due to this. Although , work independently let humans earn profitable amount of money but it also lead them in a gret loss. To quote an example , today everyone start doing trading so that they will earn money on thier own and bet a lot of money . As concluded , sometimes they loss all the money because of their greediness and then left with nothing.

In conclusion, as being a person who earn his own money without any organisation is very advantageous but we should do this with proper knowledge and with the use of positive ways.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: low pay, poor treatment and lack of benefits are offered as reasons for choosing self-employment, while stress and financial loss are identified as disadvantages. The examples about injured workers and trading help make the discussion relevant. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening says there are “more advantages,” although the task asks why people choose this path and what its disadvantages are. Some explanations are also under-developed or imprecise, particularly the link between artificial intelligence and people becoming self-employed, and the claim that students start businesses instead of working for companies. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation and keep the focus on the two questions throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, paragraphs presenting reasons, a paragraph on disadvantages and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “In contrast” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the point about artificial intelligence moves quickly to millionaires creating brands, without explaining the connection. “Secondly” introduces another reason, but the paragraph combines students starting businesses with employers’ poor treatment, which would be clearer as separate points or with a stronger link. Some transitions are also awkward or contradictory, such as “In contrast” before a point that partly repeats the advantages. Organise each paragraph around one main idea and use linking phrases to show precise relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “self-employed,” “health insurance,” “independently,” “profit” and “trading.” These choices show some awareness of the language needed to discuss work and business. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand, such as “stress machine,” “self earned,” “earn a profitable amount” and “bet a lot of money.” Spelling errors are also frequent, including “dvantages,” “Intelligance,” “buisness” and “organistaion.” Aim to learn common topic phrases as complete units, and proofread spelling carefully. More precise wording would make your ideas clearer without requiring unnecessarily complicated vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “although” and “so that.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some ideas difficult to follow. For example, “companies used to give a very low rate of income to their employers” has problems with tense and sentence meaning, while “it also lead them in a gret loss” has an incorrect verb form and an unclear grammatical pattern. There are also errors in articles, agreement and punctuation, as in “a such jobs” and “Although ,”. Practise accurate sentence patterns, especially subject–verb agreement, verb forms and clause punctuation, before adding more complexity.

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