Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.

Why might this be the case?

What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, self-employed have been increased considerable whole over the globe.It is often argued that people prefer ownership instead of job in any company or in organisation.The people choose this because of large income and having no jobs in maket. The main drawback is that it may a fear of big lose of investment.

To begin with, I believe that self-employed can earn a lot that work for long time in his bussness.For example if a person invest in any bussness he may get profit double. In present days jobs in markets become short and compitations have increased in every fields.For examples in education field job opportunity has less than candidates.As a result its good choose to work in self bases.

On the other hand,owner of any company may face a large amount of lose and become victum of poorness. He and his family will difficult to survive. For example if he invest in gold the price fell down suddenly he will face a big lose.their future will be in dangers.In ownership he can not give time to his own family like parents, children and his wife. They feel a great need then they not work properly. Children become out of control they not give attention on thier study. Therefore self-employed also have some drawbacks.

In conclusin, both case are have some benefits and disadvantages self-employed earn considerable profit but not satisfaction. In job future become secure and company give many other facilities like medical. Therefor any can bouth choose he may work or job in company to get earning.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you suggest that people may choose self-employment for higher earnings or because jobs are scarce, and you identify financial risk and reduced family time as disadvantages. These points are relevant, and examples such as investing in gold help illustrate the risks. However, the response only partially develops the ideas. The reasons for choosing self-employment are stated briefly, and the claim that a business can produce “profit double” is not explained or qualified. The disadvantages also need clearer explanation of how financial loss or long working hours affect people. Your final position is difficult to follow because it shifts between comparing employment types and recommending either option. Develop each main point and state your view more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, a paragraph about reasons, a paragraph about disadvantages, and a conclusion. “To begin with” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in focus, so the reader can identify the main sections. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: several ideas are placed next to one another without showing their relationship, particularly the discussion of children, family time, and study. Some linking phrases are repetitive or awkward, and references such as “he” and “their” do not always make it clear who is meant. Organise each paragraph around one central idea, then explain and exemplify it in sequence. Use linking expressions selectively and make pronoun references explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “self-employed,” “investment,” “profit,” “job opportunity,” and “drawbacks,” which allows you to communicate the main topic. There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as “secure” employment and “medical” facilities. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand, including “self bases,” “victum of poorness,” and “big lose.” Spelling errors such as “bussness,” “compitations,” and “conclusin” are noticeable. Build a bank of accurate phrases for business and employment, and check spelling and word forms. Prefer natural combinations such as “make a profit,” “face financial losses,” and “job opportunities are limited.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including conditional examples with “if” and a result introduced by “As a result.” This shows some effort to vary sentence forms. However, control is weak: errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently and sometimes make meaning unclear. For example, “self-employed have been increased” does not form a correct passive construction, while “He and his family will difficult to survive” is missing a suitable verb structure. The conclusion, “both case are have,” also combines incompatible forms. Practise building accurate basic clauses first, then extend them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence boundaries when proofreading.

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